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    dots Submission Name: Repercussions of my filthdots
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    Author: Cinder7
    Elite Ratio:    6.29 - 49/46/16
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       If you've read my 3rd poem, My filthy first time, you will understand this poem, this is the repercussion of hiding what really happened ,from everyone else and myself. I am ashamed.


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    dotsRepercussions of my filthdots
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    Why did you disgrace me?
    I now throw my body
    into the pit's of filth,
    all for the hope of marvel rescue.

    I now let anyone
    fill themselves
    with my sexual imperfection
    to disguise my dispair.

    I walk alone at dark,
    with my head hung low,
    in disgust and affliction
    at my own body.

    I sway at day
    to confuse the manipulators
    that I am
    what they crave.

    I surrender to the next lover
    or lack there of
    to find salvation for my trespasses
    that you've taught me to endure.

    I wander on
    in confusion of my true demands.

    I silently attempt to regain my innocence
    in which my ignorance prevents.




    Submitted on 2005-10-14 11:40:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Even though I've never been raped, I have felt this feeling before. The person who made me feel that way is in class with me right now actually. This is not easy to deal with. I know that, maybe not personally, but I know. My best friend was raped, and she got pregnant. She loves her son, but she always have to relive what she went through every time she looks at him. Once again, you wrote a wonderful poem with a lot of emotion in it.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-03-04 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      very good poem
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree you shouldn't feel ashamed. I think...I know what you're talking about here. Because I've been doing it ever since I was raped. *Shakes head* It's a vicious cycle. Once that someone should never be forced to go down.

    If yah ever want someone to talk to that's been there. PM anytime.

    BCute
    | Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      i very much liked this one, it was well executed and well expressed.
    again, it is difficult to critique, but not as difficult as the poem it follows.
    your expression of how it feels afterwards... it was so real and so ... true, i think, for those of us who've had similar expereinces, we can all relate to what you're talking about.
    what more can i say, i truely liked this poem, even from a strictly critical point of view, and esp from the emotional side.
    also, it was an excelent sequal, and if you ever find (or if by some good fortune you already have found) a way to fill this gap in your heart, i will look forward to reading another sequal. or if you just feel like continuing to address this topic, i'll look forward to those works as well. :)
    please, please don't ever let that jerk take over your view of yourself or your body. your body is a great and wonderful gift, and you should be able to find a temple within it, even dispite those who might stain it or disregard it's holyness. please, look for yourself, find yourself in who you are now, without allowing that stain to penetrate you. ... i know it's hard, i really do, but ... it can be done. true, it may never be the same, and you will always have a part of your heart blackened from the experence, but you can find the good despite the bad. if you need help just ask, and i'll do what i can. alright?

    Always,
    ~TT

    ps by 'always' i mean, i'm hear.
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by TT | [ Reply to This ]
      I've PM'd you for deeper detail's that will explain this further. Thank you for your concern and I do appreciate your honesty. I have to somewhat disagree. Rape wasn't my fault but the things I did after words were by my choice and no one elses. Thank you.
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by Cinder7 | [ Reply to This ]
      and yet another one...*sighs*. this captured the emotion, poetic stance, and imagery of the former piece perfectly, though that's not what i'm here to comment on.

    I can't do anything but fav this one, and write one of my own to compliment this piece...for it moved me in a way most writes don't ever accomplish.

    i'm so sick of these angsty teens and their love poetry, and romance, longing and passion, bereavement and personal loss...

    how about we listen to words from one who has truly experienced these *encores, audience claps all around*

    again, the Loquacious Mind is left speechless, i will be checking tu your other works later on.

    Take Care
    Loquacious Mind
    | Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by Loquacious Mind | [ Reply to This ]


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