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    dots Submission Name: Boa (at a winter party)dots
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    Author: VanillaLeaves
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 101/110/23
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBoa (at a winter party)dots
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    Hissing, hanging
    from a wooden peg
    it slithers onto the shoulders,
    feathers biting
    the exposed flesh,
    it coils around the arms.

    Lime Green Feathered Boa

    Constrictor

    who could resist
    the psychedelic embrace
    of sharp neon feathers?

    It clings to the neck,
    or slips gently onto the upper back,
    softlt molting:

    A feather rests on a plush cushion
    or sticks to a black shoe,
    silent love tokens from the jungle.

    Amid the black velvets,
    crowded burgundies,
    and washed out pinks
    of winter dress,
    feathers of green fire
    float in space,
    oval slices of imagination,
    an exotic, unexpected cloud
    trailing behind the Boa

    Constrictor.




    Submitted on 2005-10-14 12:40:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ahhh, I missed your colorful style, Emily. I must say that this is a bit different for you. The emphasis you have on "constrictor" tells me there could be something else, yet you say you don't know...

    As a theory, I'd say it was a metaphor for a very colorful person who clings too tightly to anyone who gives them a chance...possibly a lover, or simoly a "life of the party" type.

    There...how's that for a theory?

    If it's simply a feathered boa, then it's a lovely descriptive poem anyway.

    Whatever, nice.

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      hahah this is interesting... strangely concentrated. haha, odd topic... but well done! thanks for sharing, i suppose? what made you wanna write about this??
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by hmmmm... | [ Reply to This ]


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