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I still care


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
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Words: 115
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Not the best not the worst..but tell me what you think...This is yet again another poem dedicated to the one i call David. Me and him are...not fully ignoring each other....i said something to him he smiled and said something back.....then i got wrote up.....i think he's some sort of bad luck charm in the making..or maybe it's just me.....but anyways tell me what you think about this poem dedicated to DAVID!!!....yes i still love you always will...but we can never be togther...


I still care



please understand....
i need you
and i hate it
i don't hate the fact
that you up and changed
just the fact that i need you
I hate the fact
I have to cry myself to sleep
and you don't care
there i told you
not all but just the truth
would you feel better
if i went out and said i love you
Maybe...Maybe not
it still wouldn't make a difference
I thought you weren't a punk
but you're too afraid of commitment
aren't we all
no you gave up before it started
and to try to fuck my best friend
you gotta be retarded.......
to bad i still care
Love always,
Danelle




Submitted on 2005-10-14 13:46:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i felt this, i went through this once, a couple of days ago. And sometimes there are no answers, tell him, and if he still likes you, he'll tell you, and if he doesnt well im sry for you, and if he says something to make you wait, maybe its just not to make you heartbreak... thats what the one I loved did, and it sucks, and anyway try to look around, there are more than one fish in the sea.

Anyway going to the comments, good poem, it shows your emotions and really makes us understand what you feel, so continue, and try to have fun, there is no point of being dissapointed, continue there are more things to do on Earth, then love
| Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by Wolfeye_666 | [ Reply to This ]
  I can totally relate to how you feel. I've actually had a couple of ex's that were that stupid. My most recent I actually met while he was trying to date my sis. Guess I should have realized then. Good write! Bennie
| Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by disposablesoul | [ Reply to This ]
  This struck a few chords with me and it brought back some good and not so good memories for me. It was a very very good write and it hit the spot for me - well done.
| Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow! That is almost like me but instead of best friend it is just plain friend..I hate my ex :( Well anyway he's still my friend so yeah :S thanks for reveiwing poem of mine!
| Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by Dark_Angel | [ Reply to This ]
  This is so sad. To care about someone who obviously is a dumbass! I understand how you feel because i have gone through this. Anyways I like the poem and how it sounds so vague in a way. You should read my poem: Because, and tell me what you think of it.
| Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]


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