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    dots Submission Name: Imagine Thisdots
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    Author: miss__smiles
    ASL Info:    16/f/Soo, Ont
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 117/110/20
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 828
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       My ex boyfriend just told me he never loved me. It hurt to lose him as a boyfriend, but worse it hurts because I lost his friendship too.


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    dotsImagine Thisdots
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    Rumors say that you don't care
    That you lied and you never did
    When I question, you don't deny
    Did I imagine this?

    You used to come by at night
    We'd laugh, we'd talk, we'd kiss
    I could feel the sparks flying
    Did I imagine this?

    We were best friends and more
    Our love couldn't be missed
    But you say it was all a lie
    Did I imagine this?

    Did I imagine our love?
    Did I imagine all of it?
    Did I imagine the feelings?
    I guess I imagined this.




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      It's bad enough having your own pain and anguish, reading this just builds more, lol... I know how you feel I can't stress that enough... LIFE JUST SUCKS IN GENERAL RIGHT NOW...
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      this hurts to read.. it really is tragic when someone you thought loved you tells you they
    really didn't.. you've got to wonder, was i in this all alone? or like you say, "did i imagine this?" it's mind blowing. this is simple and raw.
    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Omfg just give me a name and a location and I will hunt this guy down and hold on let me think of an evil plan...hmmm...well I'll get back to you on that part at least. Ok but yea guys like him are pussys and should rot in hell. But anyways enough of that and more about your write. It was good as far as getting emotions and feelings and thoughts out. It didn't seem to have that great of a rhythm or flow. I'm thinking its cause you didn't have a good rhyme scheme going on in here like you usually do. You can change that if you want but to me this looks like a write where you really don't care what people think as long as they know how you feel cause I do that sometimes too. But anyways I see I have more of your writes to catch up on and read and I will let you know when I think of my evil plan. LOL.

    Brenna
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely horrible! I'm sorry but that was almost impossible to read. It doesn't even flow well. Please don't hate me for this because you did say to bash it. I'm just giving my honest opinion.

    Bennie
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by disposablesoul | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent write and i think everyone or at least i know what you are feeling. It flows beautifully together and i think you did a wonderful job portraying the emotions you are feeling. I just got out of a similar relationship, i wish you the best of luck
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by Lost My Love 4ever | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was excellent. Everything about it is right. It has all the ingredients i passion, fire, sadness, anger, imagery and of course great structure and flow. One of the best I have read on this site to date. Hope all works out for you.
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! I feel so angry right now! Not at you, but at your ex, I hate when guys make you feel special to just break you later. I wrote a poem: Because, it's kinda similar (in feelings) hope you read it.
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]


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