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    dots Submission Name: The Beloved Objectdots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       These are observations about eternal, as opposed to temporal, beauty; the understanding that what is considered beautiful today is media created, shallow and artificial. Much of a woman's true aura is created in her intellect, soul and self-esteem, and that is where true beauty lies.


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    dotsThe Beloved Objectdots
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    I think she can
    no longer speak-
    each orifice sewn shut-
    each of her keepers debriefed,
    'Please don't allow
    angels to opine, to
    offer more than
    compass points
    of a blurred,
    uncertain mind.'
    Her arch attitude,
    once considered coy,
    perversely matched
    a fun house mirror,
    perfectly ill-defined.

    She works wonders
    as she works the room
    to elicit reward: antique
    furnishings, French wines,
    a Ming vase, chaise lounge,
    Caribbean decor,
    Persian tapestries,
    a dozen lovers'
    press releases, gilt
    for the golden
    whore.

    Could she be
    perfect as an
    aqua-mottled vase,
    the dust of forgotten
    kingdoms, fallen
    walls, bits of
    pottery from Thrace?

    Is she poetry, an
    Aeneid, the verse
    of an ancient
    tongue, common
    as an apostle's
    contemporary when
    that same empire
    was young?

    Could she stir
    the ashes of an
    army, place
    thoughts on
    a lover's tongue?
    Pool all her
    pretty tears together
    and rise like another sun?




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      Hmmm, thoughts to provoke any woman to ponder on true beauty that the finer things in life cannot be replaced or beautified.

    This piece stirred up emotions and lifted my spirits in a sense; where I can appreciate the writer's views on women. Often, women seek outer beauty to move up in life...like a whore prostitutes her desires and fulfill aspirations through the luxury of beauty.

    In reflection of self, I'm glad to cling on to the old-fashion ways of courting or dating. Women have lost respect for self due to gaining all else. Your poetic piece clearly speaks of both types of women.

    I have enjoyed your thoughts. Thank you, Saby~*~
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by CaramelCandy | [ Reply to This ]
      I believe she can... I loved this. True poetry here, like I wish I could write. This style is intoxicating, your style my dear is an affliction I envy. You got the gift. Keep 'em coming...
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by manicsmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this was really cool and I love your insight on women and beauty. I have always noticed that people become more attractive the longer you know them even if they are not considered attractive by the general population. which goes to show that beauty does lie within. thanks for the great read.
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]


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