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    dots Submission Name: Semen For The Childrendots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 785
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    Description:
       this was totally brought on and inspired by psycho babble-I have been wanting to write a Halloween Poem for a while now but couldn't come up with the big zing-----I think I got it!


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    dotsSemen For The Childrendots
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    Semen For The Children

    The only thing that is worse
    than little children,
    is little children on October 31st.
    What is wrong with society,
    is the exact problem that is making me crazy
    All I know is the 5th –
    You can’t deny insanity
    Parents just letting
    their children go begging
    door to door for candy???
    Have you ever tried cyanide lollipops?
    Now they come in cherry.
    Cherry red like blood
    These treats I made.
    Be very afraid
    of the sweet caramel apples
    chock full of razor blades.
    This year the whole neighborhood
    Is going to taste me.
    For in every bite
    my specialty
    I added a little semen
    last night
    Just a little part of me
    …...to you
    Happy Halloween friends

    lamemansterms




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      This poem is so sickening! YOur come for the children????? Youre a sicko, no offense. I'm glad I dont live near you, or else you'd be in big trouble. I dont have anything to say on this poem, nothing good at all. Except that it provides a negative influence on many of the writers here, and I dont see how anyone can accept this poem. It's just weird! More weird than Michael Jackson rumors! Ugh, you disgust me! No offense, but this is a side of you that I do not want to know. Hopefully, you can show another side of your poetry, like about the world, love, romance, peace. YOu know stuff liek that. I will never forget this poem. One poem that I would rate as just ... sick! lol Take care.
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Heat | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay...where do you live so I can make sure I don't bring my shorty through there! YUCK...this really makes me want to go home and start inspecting candy! LMFAO!

    Ucky poo!

    But...still...can't help but smile cuz I know how you are!

    Much love,
    Li
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      ewwwwwwwwwwwww...

    thanks...lol...that makes me wanna take my daughter trick or treating...


    yeah reminds me of a conversation i had

    talking about how we always tell kids not to talk or take candy from strangers then one night of the year...its ok

    confused kids

    [censored]ed up world...lol...

    purps
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      well, when I saw the title of this I wasn't even going to click...and then it was like I couldn't stop myself. I clicked. What can I say? I think I actually saw this penned on the inside of a Hallmark Halloween card just last week, you plagiarist. It would also make for nice commentary during the evening news just before they do their segment on the safety of Halloween. Well, you've made me think twice about sending Savanna out this year...but once again I will give you credit for putting your sick mind out there-with that certain lameman charm. Please promise me you won't put your porchlight on this year.

    hey...I missed you.
    xoxoxo
    mags
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by Magnolia | [ Reply to This ]
      [censored]ing funny man [censored] funny

    This was very different then anything I have ever seen.
    NIce and twisted
    but I don't think I will be around your area anytime soon.

    Semen for all the children

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm glad I don't go out for Halloween anymore.

    This is definately different, and oddly really real. Someone in my town last year actually did that to the candy apples, a little squirt in the pot when he made them. Very creappy man. That's all I've got to say about it.

    Jess
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]
      *grins* you are somethin else. I swear. I like it. Its gross, but in a goodway. nice. i love halloween, but im staying in this year. the semen part was priceless. amazing man, a-maz-ing. *shakes head* thanks for the credit in your description. :) the only thing i would change about it is in the beginning, the "door to door" kinda throws off the flow... to me anyways, it kinda made it hard to read. This kinda reminded me of the SAW for some reason. Nicely done ^_^ definately one of your finest!
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by PsychoBabble214 | [ Reply to This ]
      Mike, you are one sick puppy...but peepants funny, man!

    Fair dinkum, I thought the cyanide drops were pretty out there, but the caramel....ha ha ha

    Excellent, in a perverted, sick, twisted, you-need-help way

    Loved it

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay Okay! the girls and I won't trick or treat your house! sheesh! lol
    This was really good in your own twisted way. How is it possible that you can take a topic that just throws everyone up in arms, and yet make it so funny and get people laughing? A true talent. Great write, Lt.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      haha great one, in the spirit of another great writer, i love to see inspiration go from one to another. she has her certain trademark on hers now i see you got yours truly a LTism and original in its own right. i have always viewed your work as unique it just has that flavor (no pun intended of course!) now on this i have been told of in the past about those horrid things that people do to candy, never once thinking anyone could actually do that. it's a shame that hospitals have to offer free x-rays for candy. i laughed at the semen part, i guess now a DNA test too should be offered ha ha. nice one LT,

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my! Haha! This is so sick and twisted that is just screams! What a fu cking poem you have written hee hee This is really gross! Very nicely written from a critics perspective. Filled with interesting details and the rhyme is really good mixed in with all this halloween psychotic content! You have given me visuals of some really gross stuff lemme tell ya! And not so much with the razor blades but the semen coated candy just made me say ewwww! So, I gotta say this is disturbing yet excellent because I am sure disturbing psychoticness is what you were going for, and you got it all over this one. Haha! Excellent sick poem here! And thanks for the heads up, I wont ever take candy from you!Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Cherry red like blood
    These treats I made.

    For in every bite
    my specialty...

    Just check the syntax and punctuation of these two parts - they made me stumble. But apart from that, GROSS dude! Hahahaha, you sick monkey. Only you would post something like this.


    I dunno what to say. I hate halloween myself. Apparently Americans spend around a billion dollars on average every time this mass-marketed time of year comes around. Now that's just ridiculous to me.

    Entertaining write as usual L.T.
    I sure as hell won't be trick-or-treating anywhere near your neck of the woods!
    Jase
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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