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    dots Submission Name: Celibate and Uglydots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
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    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I walk around celibate and ugly
    drunk on a sterile bible
    dbsessing on virtue
    contemplating sin,
    then realizing that
    we all ache for beauty
    and dream of love,
    listening to whispers soar in a mad language,
    I reach for you.




    Submitted on 2004-01-14 09:33:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i looked at all these replies and thought..wow i am way way off...

    but this made me think of the priests who abused the altar boys..

    i reach for you...celibate and ugly...

    with bad intentions that will be covered up by my church...

    i know it could be other things...

    but i hear latin...i hear a mad language as priests and nuns go crazy longing for a touch...for some passion..and then find it in the wrong places.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-11-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I used to be "celibate and ugly", now I'm just celibate. I picked this because we have a tendency to forget where we started in terms of writing, and the name was not somthing I could ignore. Now first and formest(though admittably irrelovent to the write in terms of feedback) you are gorgeous! Assuming that's a picture of you and not some model. I swear if there where girls around here that looked like you, I would not be celibate(well presumably). Anyways the write. very interesting. The ending is open enough that each thyne own, to interpretation, I like that. I love open-ended poems. I think interpretation is one of the most beautiful things about art, and this; like most other poetry is art. I admit, I've already read this, like 10 times or so, and it doesn't get old. It's new each time. Very, Very well done!!! Oh and remember celibacy's a choice, abstinence is circumstance!
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      i went digging for an oldie in honor of your year on the site, and i found this. the title is what caught my eye... i like the sterile bible part, like the person just takes it all so literally and loses out. i love the reference to the whispering mad language, like they are finally hearing the inner voice instead of the voice of that sterile bible... beautiful ending.
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, I used to be celibate and ugly. Now I'm just ugly. It's much worse being two of those things than one of them. I'm able to say, "I might be ugly, but at least I'm still getting laid!" Then, I think to myself that i must be really smooth to get laid in spite of my ugliness, and that makes me feel waaayyy cool. So cool, that you don't even know I'm cool. Like, "Hey, I'm not ugly, I just wear an ugly mask, 'cause I'm that cool!"
    | Posted on 2004-07-14 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      Drunk on a sterile bible... very nice, very nice indeed. (btw, you're not ugly. You're adorable, you have gorgeous hair, and you are amazingly talented. You're built like me, so I know. And since when do we need men to make us feel pretty? Anyway...!) The loneliness is powerfully expressed in this piece. It recalls an ache I thought I'd dealt with. Thankyou for reminding me that "moving on" isn't as easy as I thought. Well done, cuddle. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-19 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      Drunk on a sterile bible... very nice, very nice indeed. (btw, you're not ugly. You're adorable, you have gorgeous hair, and you are amazingly talented. You're built like me, so I know. And since when do we need men to make us feel pretty? Anyway...!) The loneliness is powerfully expressed in this piece. It recalls an ache I thought I'd dealt with. Thankyou for reminding me that "moving on" isn't as easy as I thought. Well done, cuddle. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-19 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      short and full of feeling. I personally feel that short poems can sometimes tell a better story than long poems. i believe you achieved this wholly. I liked it
    | Posted on 2004-01-14 00:00:00 | by love gone wrong | [ Reply to This ]
      Your not ugly. You're probably just shy and lonely.
    | Posted on 2004-01-14 00:00:00 | by Webmaster | [ Reply to This ]
      It's difficult to do a short piece that is filled with so many messages. I love the ending. It flowed smoothly from one extreme to the other. Very nice.
    | Posted on 2004-01-14 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]
      i usually don't like the particularly short ones but this got the point across nicely. good job
    | Posted on 2004-01-14 00:00:00 | by anarchyrainsupreme | [ Reply to This ]
      woah, neat ending. It makes everything fit =^..^= neatolicious, I'd say. ~Cora Windover the First
    | Posted on 2004-01-14 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]


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