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    dots Submission Name: Nightdots
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    Author: ConScribe
    ASL Info:    19/M/Tucson,AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.11 - 262/360/143
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 993
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    dotsNightdots
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    it comes when it must, always on time,
    quiet as a crows hook, and as dark as its soul,
    appearing in the turn of enlightened events

    and from dusk till dawn it is both,
    still shy after all these years




    Submitted on 2005-10-15 22:16:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Rather short. Don't get me wrong - I love short poems. But then it also makes it more of a challenge to complete a thought or expression in verse.

    The use of 'both' is somewhat peculiar as nothing follows that both would refer to and yet when you look back at the second to the last line - is it referring to both dusk and dawn.... Just a thought.
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by arkayye | [ Reply to This ]


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