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Wishfully Hoping pt 2


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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It's finished my letter to David has finally been finished. Tell me what you think and i'll maybe send it to him lol. But yea really tell me what you think. What i can do to improve it, tell me if it was bad or good. Tell me everything you think about this poem how it made you feel, how you saw it...


Wishfully Hoping pt 2



As i drown in the cold water i also drown in the feeling of heartbreak. His voice now becomes distant in my ears. The same voice that use to make my heart skip now fills my heart with dread...slowly killing what was once love and turning it into a feeling that is unexplainable. I can't feel hate for i could never hate him. I love him to much to hate him for breaking my heart, lying to me, embarrasing me. Hate is not the word to describe what i feel. Than what word can i use..slowly is this pain killing my innocence. Now i want to cry everytime his name is mentioned...David. Why did you hurt me so..your cold words that day...you telling me how much you hated me. How much i annoyed you. The blows to my heart not physically but emotionally to my heart, would pain even the most happiest perosn. Will destroy the most innocent of childs. The profane words you used against me, calling me things that should've made the gods strike you down if it weren't for my silent cries. The tears rolling down my eyes as i ran.
In the depths of my mind i should be over you. I know wishfully thinking hass messed up my flow. The poetic vibe of what was once you and I has been crushed. I've seen your new girl heard she's everything you've wanted everything i used to be. Everything that i once was when i was so naive to keep coming back to those arms. Warmth that use to grace my shoulder i cry. I don't miss you...don't miss your kisses don't miss the way you use to say my name, I might..but i'll never miss the way you lied to me. Three simple words, "I love you." All lies that you said straight to my face. I'll never miss the way i was sprung, the way i needed you. Never. But i will always hope you come back because my feelings for you can't be erased. Wishfully hoping forever...

Love Always,
Danni




Submitted on 2005-10-16 14:03:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I don't remember if I read part 1 or not...
but I too agree with all the other commentors, don't send this to him. Just let him go, you'll find somebody better for you soon!
| Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  I also want to say don't send it to him, all he deserves is for you to ignore him. Show him you can live without him.
Be happy!
| Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this, It really shows your emotions. I do have one advice, forget about the guy. I know it's easier said than done, but if you keep writing about him you will not get over him.
Much love
| Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
  its good... but really, i dont really care, i prefer poems, in poems I understand, in a letter/song well aint my style at all, anyway continue!

-Kev
| Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by Wolfeye_666 | [ Reply to This ]


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