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    dots Submission Name: Self Worthdots
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    Author: EL
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 272/189/52
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1076
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 452



    Description:
       First I would like everyone to know this is not how I want someone to make me feel it's just that its how i have been feeling.Please give me any feed back. I know it's not the best I wrote in just a few minutes. I haven't tried to edit it all yet. It's a reflection of how I am feeling. So please comment, I promise I will return the favor.


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    dotsSelf Worthdots
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    Torture my soul,
    Torment my heart,
    Break me apart.

    Forget that I exist,
    Ignore that I feel,
    Look past my needs,
    As if I'm not real.

    Bring me down,
    Kick me around,
    Tear me apart,
    With your cold cruel words.

    Show me I'm nothing,
    Show me I'm worthless,
    As you show me ,
    I mean nothing to you at all.





    Submitted on 2005-10-16 14:48:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think it's really good. It flows really well and has a powerful meaning to it. It's going on my favorites. Noone should be treated like this especially not by someone who means so much.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2007-07-11 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
      how well you write!
    thank you for sharing it just when you wrote it, it would have been horrible for you to have edited out somehting that should have remeained.
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by Morticus | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...i could completely relate, i could relate too much i believe, i actually began to cry as i read it...it had a lot of emotion..the flow was flawless, i just wanted to read more...i'm really speechless right now..i loved this..

    "Show me I'm nothing,
    Show me I'm worthless,
    As you show me ,
    I mean nothing to you at all."

    Those lines hit me hard, it felt as if i was living them..which i am a little bit..this poem is great..it puts a really great imagery in my head, and sad thoughts...the emotion was just wow..i'm in awe..anyhows this piece is going on my Favs list for sure!..keep up the great work!
    -Lucy-

    | Posted on 2006-03-19 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem expressing some very difficult and personal feelings. I think we all feel like this sometimes with ourselves but what makes it even worse is when someone we care for makes us feel this way. Nobody should ever make you feel like this and if they do then they are much good to you. I believe you have to respect yourself and demand respect from others but even as strong as I feel about that, I still find myself feeling exactly how you have described sometimes. And so they say "words dont hurt"...I dunno who thought up that crock of sh it but that is what it is. Words most definitely hurt and cause long lasting scars! Anyway, sorry for the ramble. This write just sparked me a bit. A good honest poem this is! Take care. And I hope these days you still arent feeling this way!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a very nice peice, flowed great. you should join a band and sing, it'd be very inspirational i'm sure. thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by Cannablisjunkie | [ Reply to This ]
      wow life's sux sometimes. this site can be so depressing sometimes. it's hard to believe some of the stuff some of u go through and the way it makes u feel is evident in your writing. this was good. hope u feel better soon. depression sux pretty bad
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      In your 4th line you have a misspelled word, exhist = exist
    Otherwise this is a good poem, I'm sorry to see you're sad, I hope you get feeling better real soon!
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is how i felt when i was..."getting over" my ex. It's written nicely and i hope you don't feel this way again. Anyone who reads this should be able to feel your pain.
    Much Luv,
    Danni
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is well written, but I do hope that you do not want people to make you feel like you are worthless. That would be bad... Check out my poem: Darkness and tell me what you think.
    Much love
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      for me this reminds me of a person, helpless in a relationship, so overcome with emotion for the other person, but still feeling so unloved. and too enamoured to find it somewhere else.


    thats just me, but i really liked this piece.

    <333
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by jeffiner | [ Reply to This ]


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