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Ready 4 Love

Author: angel_eyes9701
ASL Info:    24 F Salem, OR
Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 19 /33 /14
Words: 148
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Ready 4 Love

Take my hand and lead the way;
tell me all you want to say.
Whisper softly in my ear,
all those things I want to hear.
Kiss my lips and touch my skin;
bring out passions deep within.
Pull me close and hold me near;
take away my pain and fear.
In the darkness of the night,
be my beacon, shine your light.
In the brightness of the sun,
show me that you are the one.
Give me wings so I can fly;
for I can soar when you're nearby.
Enter my heart, break down the wall,
it's time for me to watch it fall.
I've been a prisoner, can't you see?
Break my chains and set me free.
Strip me of my armor tight;
you'll find I won't put up a fight.
Release my soul held deep within . . .
I'm ready now, let love begin.

Submitted on 2005-10-16 17:02:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Beautiful indeed. Written out of love one might say. I doubt not that it was your heart writting and not your brain. These kind of poems are most times the easiest. Dont get me wrong, they may not be, I find it hard to write as you have. But the heart clears the mind when it is pure. If a heart is clouded, so is the mind. I wonder if you spent immense amounts of time on it, or whether it just flowed out and was revised a little. Beautiful, I loved it. Thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by Drayke | [ Reply to This ]
  a beautiful thought, surely, but all in all, i think that you've have subsituted simplicity for sake of making it work...a concept which dampens the ideal of the piece, and brings the poet out to be nothing more than a simple writer. Love, in my opinion, is the most difficult, though beautiful, thing to write of or about, the words are magnified, if only because of the meaning of the poem, and what it stands for, of who its about, they that were hurt, those still in love, etc...i enjoy the piece for the simple decision you wrote, but dont fail in regards to submit your passion still, it might make your words come across with the exact meaning you were attempting to describe...though with fewer, more precise words...all in all, i think you have a beautiful start to something that has the potential to become far greater...

| Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by nwproud | [ Reply to This ]

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