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    dots Submission Name: Believedots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 519
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       Well...I'm happy believe it or not...I just have some things running through my mind. I need to see my baby. I need a reason to believe. I think his arms around me will give me that. I hope they do. They have to.


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    dotsBelievedots
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    When you said jump,
    I let go of everything in my life,
    And let you catch me.
    I saw the world in your eyes,
    All my desires, all my wishes,
    Wrapped up in one man.
    Not the kind to give my heart away,
    But it was easy with you.
    I believed in us.
    I believed the sun rose with your smile,
    And the clouds cried with your tears.
    I'm safe in your arms,
    I'm lost in your eyes,
    And I'm swept away in the river of your soul.
    I hope I never find my way back.
    And now, with thousands miles between us,
    You ask me one thing,
    To believe.
    To believe in everything we are,
    In everything we have.
    You say trust in the love,
    But I'm drowning in the sorrow.
    Suffocating on lonliness.
    I'll fight to the surface,
    I always have, but baby,
    When I go to grab your hand,
    And I'm grasping at air,
    It's really really hard, to find a way,
    To Believe.




    Submitted on 2005-10-16 20:00:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am touched deeply by your images and feelings.

    When you said jump,
    I let go of everything in my life,
    And let you catch me.

    This is a great picture of the risks and trusts involved in love.

    Thanks for letting us see that part of you... belief and doubt.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem and understand where you are coming from
    You are in love with someone you are not sure loves you as much as you love him
    I can tell from your words that you truefully love this man and would give anything to be back in his arms

    I believe that love will conquer all
    if this relationship was meant to be which I believe it was then you too will live a beautiful life together
    Know that distance does not break the hands of love it only draws you closer

    Take Care
    Ron

    And thanks for your recent comments its words from people like you that let me know that my poems are reaching people
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      i myself have a long-distance love, and it is so hard sometimes.. just wanting to be together, to hold hands.. we have to believe that we will find a way, this love is so precious.. i could feel a release in the beginning part of this, letting yourself go totally with that person whom you love so much.. the losing yourself in someone else is not always a good thing, but i understand what you mean by it.. i can look in my lover's eyes and fall right into her and never want to come back..

    i hope you two can be together soon.

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      To believe in everything we are...to believe...reminds me of how hard it is for us to love without being self-centered...to give it all we have even if it means pain, hurt, and missing each other...hang in there...this is a wonderful write...firing the need to believe in another though love.
    ~Alan
    | Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooooh, you have two parts in this, back than, when you were together, and now, with the reality of being apart, you have to question your feelings.

    I like your determination to fight to the surface, it shows that you're still in there fighting.

    Very well done, a pleasure to read, although obviously, I feel for your heartache.

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow very intense.Not a whole lot more I can say about this piece. I can certainly relate I think to the relationship described here which is why it probably touched me so much.

    Thabks you for your beautiful words of inspiration an undying love... It gives me much hope for the future!

    Ella
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]


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