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Dieing


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 96
Class/Type: Poetry /I am dead inside
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yea i wrote this when i was suicidal so tell me what you think.


Dieing



dieing in a pool of sins
where on starts the other ends
not knowing where this pain begins
water in my pool of sins

drowning now i can't breath
the pain that brings me to my knees
on the brink of my insanity
so painful i can't breath

slits down my wrist and i'm no fool
trying to find my inner jewel
searching for my sharpest tool
there's blood and i'm no fool

slowly dieing
and i'm trying
to grasp the rules of life
commiting a painful suicide
with a real sharp knife




Submitted on 2005-10-17 14:17:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I am not a suicidal person, but i am feelin' this poem. I have a piece similar to this title "Where there's no Light". I might post it...but I probably won't! But yo keep it up. I hope you have got over those thoughts! I like you style! You remind me of a younger female version of myself! peace and bless yo!
| Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by L.i. | [ Reply to This ]
  Really good poem; and the words just seem to suck you in. I like how you described the feelings of pain and searching, and the bluntness of the end. Keep up the good work!
| Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Azure | [ Reply to This ]
  i think u mean breathe instead of breath. u also spell dieing as dying. unless u were doing that on purpose. this one was so cool. it was like a rap poem to me. fave! oh yeah thanx for reading all my stuff. much luv and support
| Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  I lke it, you express your ideas clearly, and like i said, iots good, so continue, im kinda in a hurry so i wont talk for long, anyway, continue buh bye g2g
Kev-
| Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by Wolfeye_666 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is not bad. I do like your other poems better. I'm not too much into suicidal poems, and with this one you are very clear about your intentions. i'm glad you are no longer suicidal.
Nothing but love for you.
See ya around
| Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]


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