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    dots Submission Name: Coffeedots
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    Author: Oli
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 206/211/53
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1067
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    Description:
       I'm in my favorate coffee shop drinking black coffee and I felt like writing about this great beverage.


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    Coffee on the table
    steaming oh so hot

    waiting to be consumed
    by one who is not

    not afraid of it's bitter sweet liquid
    that warms the soul to it's very core

    'tis the drink of the ones
    who are bold




    Submitted on 2005-10-17 15:37:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love coffee beyond words, so the title caught my attention, and Im glad it did. You described it excellently. Very nicely done. As always, great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      ooooh someone who shares my desire and passion for coffee... but now im wondering is this poem purely about a caffeine drink that can lift the load of a bad day and provide satisfaction with each touch to your lips or is it about . . . . . .? (had to ask)

    *keep spreading the love and sipping 'em cups*

    nadia
    | Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
      such passion over coffee?
    well done, eventhough I do not have the caffeine craze. who would think such poem can be achieved about a beverage consumed by thousands of people every morning? of course you did and you did a wonderful job.

    lauraaa
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by She Is Insane | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I've never seen such passion about such a divine beverage. Coffee is my lifeblood, my soul, my strength. Without coffee I would sleep for eternity. If I only were not at school I would make a pot. :(
    Then, when I'm off my gaurd, you use depth
    "waiting to be consumed
    by one who is not"
    Thoughtful in a simple poem of joy. Wow.
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by Tekin_Kashami | [ Reply to This ]
      Kinda makes me want to go upstairs and put on a pot of coffee! Hard to believe the price of the stuff these days, but then everything else is out of sight so why not coffee. Enjoyed the read...
    !doc`
    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      a good poem

    maybe just a little short

    i am so consumed with coffee in my system it gets ridiculous

    im cutting down thou

    Continue to write as it heals

    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, this was cute. Had a strong beginning and sort of fizzed off towards the end as far as that "flow and rhyme" stuff goes, but the smiles from the thought made up for that big time. I liked the second stanza too. Coffee...its something worth writing about aint it, HA! Good stuff maynard. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Hee hee! A passionate poem about coffee?! YEAY! I love coffee! Thank god...or someone...Juan Valdez...for coffee! Woo hoo! I couldnt function in the morning without my caffeine fix and nothing does it like coffee does it! Ooooh baby! haha! I dont believe I have ever read a poem about coffee before so two thumbs up just for that fact. Another plus, its a passion poem about coffee...YEAY! Guess you can tell I love the stuff. Cept I dont like it black...gotta have some cream and sugar in there too...YUM! I cannot criticise a poem about this magnificent drink! Think I need a cup now! Thanks for sharing this coffee shop passion! Good stuff! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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