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Author: dmm
ASL Info:    50/M/Minnesota
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I took dr_tiggers' challenge and wrote a 'jellybean' poem


Where the heck are my jellybeans,
did I leave 'em in my pants?
Or are they out in the back yard
under a pile of ants,
Did momma take them 'fore dinner
so I wouldn't get too full,
Or did some stranger steal 'em
thinkin' they was jewels.
I promise I won't hurt you if ya
just give'em back to me,
Bring me back them beans of jelly,
they don't grow on trees.

Submitted on 2005-10-17 18:13:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Gimme back my jellybeans yah.... yah.... yah

Hahaha... this was a fun read Dan and I enjoy this. Keep up the good work, I had a good laugh with this.

God bless and have a wonderful Dan.
| Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
  I love Jellybeans! This was adorable. Nice little jingle to it. I can see a grummy little kid searching high and low for those jellybeans. This was a delight to read.

| Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  Cute, Dan, cute!
Doc started something with the jellybeans and it seems to be catching on.
I just read Graeme's version and he says he is hooked, so maybe he is the one who stole yours.
| Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
  Very cute indeed, Dan. Something you'd find in a children's book for sure.

Spoken in their language.

Maybe I'll give this one a try.

| Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Got a chuckle out of this one Dan...
Tell ya what I will keep my eye open fer ya and maybe those Jellybeans will turn up somewhere soon.
Enjoyed the read,
| Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  ha ha! Nice one Dan, sweet and innocent, exactly like jelly beans!

A funny little read, reat for kids, and those of us who still think like 'em.

Bloody excellent!

Be Happy

| Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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