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    dots Submission Name: Kettledots
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    Author: xmangaXfreakx
    ASL Info:    13/f/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 31/30/22
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 878
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 942



    Description:
       I wrote this because I was thinking of my ex and how he dumped me 4 my best friend. ugh. it doesnt make much sense, but if you think hard, it does.


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    dotsKettledots
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    Verse 1:

    Just last week, seeing you, flipped me over, turned me blue.
    I loved with my everything, my first love, my first fling, then you went away, with her I mean, and I need you back again.

    Chorus:

    Because I'm headed somewhere dark, and I don't like the looks of it. Can't you save me from the storm? Like you did since we were kids? I need you more than ever. To be safe in your arms forever. Please don't let me fall. Be my net.

    Verse 2:

    Promise me you'll save me from the corners. Promise me you'll save me from the dark.
    I need your help, I need your answers, right now, more than never. Please don't set me anywhere, nowhere is safe for me. In a circle room, I'll find the corners, that's just who far in I am.

    Chorus



    (more later but I ran out of words.)




    Submitted on 2005-10-17 19:38:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ah first love...Yep believe it or not I can still remember that far back. Nice little write you have here but, sorry 'bout the broken heart. Hope there will be many more to come though 'cause it is a major part of life to experience.
    Enjoyed the read,
    !doc`
    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      can you post songs on this site or am i just not getting your piece.im sure if you do finish it , it will be quite a soul searching soul .I do feel a bit of the poet in it however
    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by tinashe | [ Reply to This ]
      It's pretty good, You could work on the flow a little though. I think the form you put it in is a little hard to read to but thats just me, everyone has there own form. Besides that though it was really quite good. Keep up the good work.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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