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    dots Submission Name: Mend to a Broken Heartdots
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    Author: StevenJay
    ASL Info:    21, Male, Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 27/36/14
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       This is a poem for anyone who ever gave up on love. If love is true then there is no way you can ever forget or ever truly move on.


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    To think of someone in the middle of the day
    With nothing to even spark a memory
    Is one of the most meaningful moments anyone can have,
    To be so special that you’re constantly on the mind of someone else is one of the most powerful feelings around,
    To be able to look into someone’s eyes and know that you don’t ever want to leave
    Because there is nowhere else you would rather be
    Is truly the essence of love,
    To be able to know that everything will be ok as long as that person is there to hold you
    Shows that love is the most important thing people can share with one another,
    To be able to think of heaven and see the face of your partner
    Shows that you truly cannot live without them,
    To know that loosing someone can be the end of the world is a sign that you need that person to be by your side,
    Love is something that people have needed since the day they were born and without it they are truly lifeless,
    To be able to hold on to the memories that hurt so bad
    Shows that person means everything to you,
    To know that your heart truly beats for someone else is one of the most amazing discoveries of all time,
    To love when love is lost is real and to realize that love will live forever no matter what
    Is the reason why people can never give up,
    Or ever forget…




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      i really like this! i definitely believe in true love, and this piece is a gorgeous portrayal of love in a nutshell. this piece holds a lot of heartfelt meaning for me; mostly because the guy im with is a really great one, and we fit almost all of the above.
    your last two lines were very powerful to me, i dont really know why. i just thought you should know that they had that effect; they really blew me away. and youre absolutely right, without love, life would have no point. we would all be lifeless, cold machines with synthetic skin stretched over us. -shudders-
    anyways, i really loved it. great write, i almost cried. =]

    - Michi
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by _Phoenix | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey-just wanted to say that i really liked this. the repitition of the "To..." is really strengthining. i'm not really sure if i believe in love but i have experianced some of the stuff you talk about and those experiences really stayed with me. believer in love or not, this piece was beautifuly written. one suggestion- "Love is something people have needed since the day they were born..." kinda breaks up the flow. the line is beautiful and revelant to your message but maybe you might want to rework it somehow?
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Sasha Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      nice work... maybe wat u say is rite... coz i loved once and i got my heart broken... but i still still love him and i cant forget... and i pray everynight to god to just help me forget but the next day he's still on my mind...i beloeve there is love out there somewhere but i don't yhink its for me. but i like the way u put this thought of yours across. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way you expressed the importance of love. You are absolutely correct, life is meaningless without love, but also without hate.
    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by crowded_mind | [ Reply to This ]


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