[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Wordsdots

    Author: Athalia
    Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 156/124/21
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 940
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 554

       A conversation, between a writer and one who questions the writer.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Pensive? No. Languid.
    Or tranquil.
    Calm? I suppose. But
    Languid just…
    Flows better.
    Tired? Not tired.
    Sleepy. Languid.
    Languid? Yes.
    What? Why always these
    Words? Precision. You
    Know. No? Yes. It has
    To be—good bad better
    Verse. Goes with the
    Territory. Territory?
    Writing. Words.
    Connotations. Love.

    Submitted on 2005-10-17 23:56:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      we can play with words all we want to..but love is still love, no matter what word is used, no matter what language...

    we play with our reactions to love, about love and write them on paper with word play, finding the best description we can...

    this poem is really good the way it uses repetition building upon repetition...
    but in the end it is just all "words"

    and maybe love just can't be defined by words...

    maybe poetry can't either..it is about feeling, feeling feeling.
    | Posted on 2011-03-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      ha ha! Very cleverly done, showing all the words we have at our disposal, why we use some of them over others, and then, your great punch line...

    There's no substitute for love.

    Excellent poem, I love it!

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this very good. I did not expect what I read from the title, which I think could be something more profound, but otherwise, this is an excellent poem and I would not change anything else about it. nice ending too. I hope to read more of your writing. nice work here.
    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]