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    dots Submission Name: Oh, my headdots

    Author: Ratboy
    ASL Info:    17/Male/South Slocan B.C.
    Elite Ratio:    5.17 - 50/73/22
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Just some of my thoughts and questions regarding various things. If you feel up to it, tell me some of your own philosophies and ponderings.

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    dotsOh, my headdots

    Fabricate a color that your eyes have never seen
    Not red, or blue, or yellow, or any in between
    Think about forever, the stupidity of time
    Balanced on a string, or flipped upon a dime
    Could you still exist if we destroyed your precious brain?
    If you die tomorrow, whatís the point of being sane?
    Maybe thereís no heaven, maybe hell is in the mind
    Destiny is candy thoughts to feed the hopeful kind
    Look into the sky tonight and ponder of the end
    Infinity can only stretch as far as it can mend
    Anything is everything; itís how you choose to see
    If your head is stuck, perhaps, you need to set it free

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    ||| Comments |||
      i agree with Kim, very thought provoking.
    i like the consistent wording and rhyme, and I think it is a well done piece.
    my own pondering? ok...*ponders*...is Britney Spears' hair really blonde?
    just kidding!
    yup, i like it!

    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]
      I must commend you also.

    Maybe thereís no heaven, maybe hell is in the mind
    Destiny is candy thoughts to feed the hopeful kind

    You lingo is superb and the poem itself flows perfectly. I canít say much more than the previous comment but i wish just to encourage so you will be tempted to write more.
    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by BrokenBlade | [ Reply to This ]
      That is a very cute piece, and very thought provoking as well..
    Your rhyming flows well and doesn't seem forced at all.. Rather, it seems as if it just flowed out of you and through your hand onto the paper..
    This is a beautiful way to ask questions about life, and I commend you on the way you did so..
    Very beautiful..
    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this very much, Sam. I think this is one of your better thought provoking pieces.

    To imagine a new color that has never been seen before, how would you describe it to someone?
    Heaven and Hell, brings up the question of God and Satan. Who is to say that any of them really exist? And if you do say so, then let me see with my two eyes.
    Is there an end to the sky? And if there is, what happens when you get there?

    Okay, just my thoughts on some of what you offered up.
    Thanks for the great read. I can't wait for the next post. You've got talent, kid. Lol.

    See ya
    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]

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