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i still love you

Author: star_on_fire22
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Class/Type: Deep Thought /You left me
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my friends who know me from school.. just shut up... everyone else comment it and tell em how bad it sucks. i know it does. but i just wanted to write something for here and i had soem feelings i had to get out... love sucks. i hate it. if your not in love. than never do it!! it will kill you. or ruin you.

i still love you

your gone from my life now.
i miss you so much
why couldnt it of been me you loved instead of that girl.
i had always been faithful,
i would of loved you until the end.
i gave you my heart and you messed with it.
you messed it up so bad i dont think i can love again.
than she came along.
she was just a fling.
but somehow that fling tunred into love.
than, like you always do,
you cheated on her and lied to her face.
so she left you.
now you beg for her back.
why couldnt that of been me?
i would of forgiven you and tooken you back.
shes messing with your mind just like you did to mine.
maybe you do deserve some of it.
but i still love you and i cant change it.
i was in love with you.
you were in love with the thought of a toy.
i was the yo-yo.
you cheated, you were sorry, i forgave you.
i always came back to you.
why couldnt you of just left me be so i could heal properly?
i tell myself im better now.
but am i?
when i see you something hurts deep inside of me,
i have to look away for fear of crying.
i swear i should be over you by now.
maybe if someone new came along i would forget those days that i was with you.
but no one comes along.
atleast no one who can be as great as you were.
the few who come i give them a chance and come up with a dumb reason to leave them.
really the only reason is;
I still love you.

Submitted on 2005-10-19 03:13:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  when i see you something hurts deep inside of me,
i have to look away for fear of crying.
i swear i should be over you by now.

see that up there that is the best few lines ive read in awhile. i get that feeling to all the time. and just to tell you even if you find someone new everytime you see that guy it'll still hurt, alot. for me its been over a year and i still love him it still kills to see him. but when hes gone i focua on my boyfriend, who loves me. actually loves me!

back to your poem. it was okay. dont call it crap if it helps you relize emotions that are hurting inside thats good! really good! you could be doing somthing stupider. i like the emotion and the message you were tryign to give off.
i could have been shorter or more to the point i think. and some words you chose just were right but look it over. read it over. edit it. it could be a great peice of writting.
| Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this write was a way of getting your feelings out...and I to felt the emotions you are going through in your words.. Love does hurt and the ones we love don't always feel the same about us or treat us like we want to be treated... Everything we expierence in life, we can use to make better choices the next time.. My advice is to make a list of what you want from a relationship and compare that list to how the person you care about treats you. It is unfortunate but people treat us the way we let them ...So put what's most important at the top of this list and if they measure up or treat you the way you want to be treated, keep looking... Take Care... Desi
| Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with fallen one...choice of words makes this seem more of a ramble then deep thoughts...but hey sometimes when we are so full of emotion all our coherent thoughts get jumbled up...

This is only the first of your posts I've read so allow me to browse somemore so I can get a feel for your style of writing before I fully critique.

| Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ] not so sure about your choice of words here but as for the emotion of this write...I hear yah loud and clear...I understand why you say you hate 'love', i've been there. Just a piece of advice, hating it won't solve anything. Just give it time or whatever... Atleast try to be positive about your situation ^_^ umm...lousy relationships are great sources for great poems ^_^ Anyway,hope things work out for you
| Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by Fallen One | [ Reply to This ]

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