Description: this poem i wrote the day i asked this guy out. he said he didn't have the same feelings for me that i had for him. i wrote this ages ago and have gotten over it so please no sympathy.
i don't care what you say about my poem as long as you don't bash it to bits.
blunt words -------------------------------------------
Blunt words cut through me.
Though they do not puncture,
It shatters my heart.
And as I walk away, from my love.
I cry a thousand tears,
That he will never see.
Simple and to the point. I'm glad you are over this and him. I think the poem was well worded and full of emotions that ranged from despair to hurt. I think the way you ended this was just right. Good job.
There is always beauty in simplicity. If brevity is the soul of wit, certainly it is also the heart of emotion. The rythm of the work is very...eastern, asian. I like it, it fits the words well.
Yeah, words can do that. I agree that you should never let him see you cry. Guys are jerks a lot of the time, but there are some good ones left. You'll find one. Hugs, Amy
once again thought process being totally duplicated in your work. man i can't believe how many tears i have cried that he hasnt know about. i loved this poem. short, to the point, yet grasping at emotions and tugging on the strings of the heart. another good work i must say... keep it up
Submission Name: blunt words
