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    dots Submission Name: Romeo and Julietdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 857
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       My boy said I was in love with love...he said that I was like Romeo. So I wrote a poem about it.


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    dotsRomeo and Julietdots
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    he called her romeo
    because she was in love
    he said with love
    she said juliet

    and they layed on the bed
    and she played with his hair
    and he whispered in her head
    and she breathed in the air

    he watched her face
    and she never would forget
    he asked to be called by anothe name
    he asked to be her Juliet




    Submitted on 2005-10-19 08:39:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The poem is good, but I have to say it isn't all that inventive.

    This line is confusing... "he called her romeo
    because she was in love" May I ask why a guy would call a girl Romeo? Other then that the poem is good.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      he called her romio????????????/oh my god im confused it was good though i get confussed easly dont really take it to heart
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by bloodied_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very pretty, you shouldn't change a thing, because that would take away from the beauty of it. You know what's funny? Jessie said the other day that all those boys that claimed to be in love with you were probably actually in love with the idea of being in love (you might have told her that?). Funny f*cked up world we're living in. I had sex with Tony last night. on our luch break. It was awful, and I am pissed off. Why didn't I just say no?
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      hey long time no read or write hows things you pot is good a usual i did not get confused either like you fit comment a story with a twist
    good imagination and geat wite
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      This was cunfusing, I kinda get the point but i think you should add more detail to the piece well i don't what else to say to you keep writing and hope to hear from you.
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by seven11 | [ Reply to This ]


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