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    dots Submission Name: Pictures....Denunciationsdots
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    Author: melancholymaid
    ASL Info:    21/female/Tennessee
    Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 112/136/34
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 197
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       Hmmm....This one will probably not be understood very well. That's ok, I guess. But because no one will understand it, I know I will be getting a lot of negative feedback.

    I guess it is basically about humanity.
    Pictures, mirrors, denunciations....We look at others and ourselves in judgement. We denounce our fellow humans constantly. It's terrible, really. We spend all of our lives pointing the finger; meanwhile, we're rotting away.
    We cause our own pollution. We kill each other and we won't even live up to it.
    Commercial lies and cereal box smiles own us and we don't even know it. There is a way out. I have found it. Be original. Get out of it all.

    The last line doesn't really fit; however, it has a purpose. We lie next to our trusted, friend, lover, etc., but we don't know them, do we? I mean truly... Just watch how your loved one acts around other people. Sometimes completely different. We are different with everyone. We have so many facets that we can't possiby show them all at once to one person....
    Just something to ponder...


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    Pictures, mirrors, denunciations.
    Woman, doubt your invitations.

    Beasts gather in their gluttonous feast.
    Milky, bony babies die in wanton revelry.

    Death rolls in like smoke over our industrious heads.
    We eat lust for breakfast and sweat sin when our bodies are overwrought.

    And slowly, dreadfully Envy arrives.
    She's dragging her long and cubersome coat behind.
    Somewhere hidden is her grateful dagger, waiting patiently for the liquid of lover's quarrel.

    In the morning, awake me and we will kill each other again.




    Submitted on 2005-10-19 11:56:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ahem, shoot that was strong. Well, you don't have to worry about me understanding it. I get the message just fine. Hmm about the poems. It appears to be more thought than tangible planning. The ones that are thought often revels a portion of ourselves. I love the last line, but why not In the morning, awake me, and not wake me?
    | Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]
      that is absolutely awesome. i am totally completely freakin impressed! you use metaphor and anthropomorphism very very well. i have nothing but utmost praise for you.

    sidenote...i'd be interested to hear your comments on my piece "whore"...it's theme and imagery are very similar in nature to what you've done here.

    again, amazing job. daddy like.
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]



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