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    dots Submission Name: Its still theredots
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    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       ummm.... so yeah. okay


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    dotsIts still theredots
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    I thought the pain would go away
    I thought it would only last for a little while
    But its been quite a while since we decided to call it quits
    and the pain still feels like it was yesterday
    I keep tryin to smile and shake you off but I cant
    I thought I was immune to love
    And I sure as hell didnt think I loved you
    But yet all I can think about is you
    I wasted 30 sheets of paper just writting your name
    and letters I would never mail
    As much as it hurts for me to admit it
    I loved you and I still do
    We treated each other like dirt
    Our relationship was so bad
    People told us to seek counseling
    But I still want you back
    The more evil you were to me the more I loved you
    I want you back
    But it's too late
    Cause you have already moved on.




    Submitted on 2005-10-19 17:17:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is one of the better "break up" poems i have read here in quite some time. Well Done. Thanks for the read.
    | Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by Caper-Graham26 | [ Reply to This ]
      yes that would suck if it's from personal experience. If it is fiction then way to go well done. this poem is filled with emotion. very good
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]
      I just personally hope that was not from real experience...only for the line that said the more evil you were to me the more i loved you...if that is true that is not good...not good at all...been there and it sucks...It was a really good poem though...i liked it a great deal and related well with it...flowed well and easy to read
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by tinkerbellsas | [ Reply to This ]
      thats a good poem. really good, i really admire youre writting. anyways back to the poem, so people just arent good for eachother and always listen to others becuase no matter who youre with youll always be way to in to "it" to see if the relationship is unhealthy,
    xox crazyb
    | Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem just shows how much [censored] love can go through and yet have it still be there.It descirbes my situation some what.It was good.I liked.

    [-Candace-]
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]
      (lights a ciggarette, coughs . . . coughs again) i dunno. it was kinda whiny. you just put your surface feelings. you didn't really analyze them. you gotta dig deeper. go as deep as you can go. don't be afraid. it's just you you're exploring.
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      the way you wrote that is simply wonderful but let me tell you pain takes its time but learn from your past and look to your future , love is painful i know it can be specially when it ends up in putting your heart to pieces but let your mind come into play and think straight not just a dream that may , control your mind and heart
    and think of yourself and judge yourself with fairness , check where you went wrong and so on and perhaps one day things will smile your way , you're still 15 with a lot to do in this big world today
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]
      thats just how i feel right now.. weve been apart for over a year now but i still love him everymuch as i did the first day we kissed.. even tho weve both grown n tried it agen it jus wasnt the same n i realize that my memories are just as good as the feel thing.. but my memories cant hold me or help me.. not like he used to n its jus very sad that i still hold on to him wen i should move on.. n wow i cant believe i jus said that.. but um yea i think ur poem jus made me see alot of things so thanks
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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