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Submission Name: Fractured Pearl dots

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Author:	Tekin_Kashami
ASL Info:	13/male/Houston, Texas
Elite Ratio:	4.4 - 131/77/22
Words:	83

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	227
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	656

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This is a GIGANTIC metaphor.

Fractured Pearl dots

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The fey dance gracefully
in their gold garnished robes
leaves flowing around them
By magic behoved
The amber stars fall together in order
Perfection sublime
Immortality emblazed
On their faces, divine
Subtle enchantments growing
Meretricious
Mystic eternities not the leat bit
Mentally nutritous
Doth curses grow weaker
When the sun kindly shines?
Or do the shadows grow darker,
their outlines redefined?
The more glorious the face
The more every blemish screams
Whether divine beauty is false
Only the beholder can deem.

Submitted on 2005-10-19 18:50:52 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!

||| Comments |||
  Well there you go.....
A lover of the word in all its splendour and complexity
Sometimes it is fun to read a poem with a dictionary close by.
Sometimes it's great just for the way the words sound and the inherent meaning they carry even without full mental recognition.
Sure to read you again.
| Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
  Well I know what the fey are, anyway.

I quite liked this, great use of words to convey your meaning (meretricious will have 'em guessing) and very nively done.

I'd say you're having a go at the false religions that are springing up everywhere, that people who realise their own mortality (the "fey") turn to.

The only other meaning I could see is perhaps the drug-involved "rave" parties or something like that...

I love a thoughtful poem

Very well done

be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  i felt this was more of a "beauty fades, but the soul is forever" good imagery in it all...but yea, what IS a "fey"? this is a really good metaphor, though. it reads really fast and frantic, i dont know if that was the intent, but it happened. good write.
| Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]
  Yes,this is one GIAGANTIC metaphor!I really understand this."Beauty is in the eye of the beholder" is what I think it's saying.Very good imagery,too...Just one thing..What is "fey"?I saw that when I was reading this and it just caught me off guard.Maybe it's a typo,perhaps?Well,I really like this and it's going on my fav list.Lovely job and very original in my mind.God bless! :D - Lindel
| Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by LRRolins | [ Reply to This ]

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