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    dots Submission Name: Dear Mom (Good)dots
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    Author: Suicidalchild51
    ASL Info:    15/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 402/332/83
    Words: 272
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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       This is what i wrote after my mom found bad stuff on my myspace.


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    dotsDear Mom (Good)dots
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    I Know You probably hat eme,
    For all the pain I caused,
    Now I'm working on it,
    To help win back your love.

    I'm tryng to be your perfect,
    The opne you've always wanted,
    I used to be,
    And honestly I Loved it.

    You were there for me,
    Everytime i turned to puke,
    you even cleaned the bucket,
    Why? i have no clue.

    You were by my side,
    You held my hand tight,
    The first time i had cramps,
    All throughout the night.

    You rush home after work,
    To take me places,
    I know i dont show it,
    But ya i appreciate it.

    You used to make my lunch,
    And put it in my pail,
    I used to get made fun of,
    But tried not to care.

    You used to paint my nails,
    Vibarant with color,
    I couldnt do it better,
    You were like no other.

    You stuck up for me,
    When Jim yelled in my face,
    Tho you would get beaten,
    You still did it.

    You used to dance with me,
    All the time in the car,
    Dancing like freaks,
    or like a rockstar.

    You buy me stuff,
    That i dont need,
    Shoes Jeans Shirts Socks,
    Girly shirts with beads.

    Everything you do for me,
    I Couldnt live without,
    But mostly i need you,
    Whether i wisper or i shout,

    You never know what you have,
    Untill its gone,
    Now ive lost you,
    And it hurts alot.

    I just want you back,
    Im changing for the better of us two,
    Take me back mom,
    Im sorry, I Love You.




    Submitted on 2005-10-19 21:14:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Something has happened in my life that has made me see that a mother's love is forever no matter what you do.
    This was an excellent work keep it up and i hope everything works out between you and your mom. God bless.
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by Shardae | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG i loved that i'm still trying to get my dad to trust me after i broke him and his long term gf up cause i dated her son he still seems to think i'm a slut and everything and i dont think he'll ever trust me again i loved how you conveyed the emotion in that one i liked the stanza's where you mentioned the puke in the bucket and the cramps the most, because i think that that just expressed to everyone how much everyday mothers do for you and alot of mothers actually do do that for their children but all in all excelent job kee it up love it good job (if i knew how to say good job in a different language i would)
    | Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by phsycoticangel | [ Reply to This ]
      oh girl, dont you know?!?!? you can never lose a mothers love! this is a very wonderful poem, it tears me up! give this to your mother. she loves you no matter what she finds in your space! she might get angry and shout and pout, but she will always be your mother! and she will always love you! i have six daughters and this is exactly what i am afraid will happen to one of them one day. i dont ever want them to think that i dont love them! no matter what they do. they could burn my house down on prupose and i would still love them! tell your mom and hug her too!~~tracy
    | Posted on 2005-11-06 00:00:00 | by tmullins | [ Reply to This ]
      i can relate to this in the sense that i know how much over the past year atleast that i have hurt my mom. by pushing her out of my life when i knew that i needed her the most. i think that your mom still loves you for no mother could stop loving her child. i just think that she is hurt and angry over whatever you wrote on myspace. my advice is give her some time and she will calm down and im sure the two of you can work it out. seems to me that you two are more like friends than mother and daughter. i hope all works out for you...Joy
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem makes me think of all the times that I have hurt my mom emotionally even though she doesn't show it. The flow of this write could have been better to an extent and how can you write such a good piece but don't share it with others?
    This was a great apology to your mom and I think you can do wonderful and marvelous works if you keep your head up and don't stop to cease what you know you can do.
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! i really got alot from this and i really liked this and i know how it feels and i am doing the same thing with my mom actually trying to be close with her and having a relationship and it does make thinigs a whole lot easier and i belive that all thing will work out for you! good luck and very good write!1 luv ya!
    **KeLLe**
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]



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