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    dots Submission Name: i cant be there so dontdots
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    Author: EEKS
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    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       weirdo weirdo weirdo is me.. the heart on my sleeve line is in the poem i write the other day.


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    dont wear your heart on your sleeve
    ill just rip it away
    and dont count on me
    i never come through anyway
    dont expect me to be there
    dont think that im your friend
    dont think im just playing im as serious as can be and thats deadly
    dont need me
    because i wont be your shoulder to cry on
    ill be the back you see
    as im walking away
    i cant handle this commitment shit
    even commiting to an institution is to much for me
    much less commiting to being a friend
    dont count on me and dont add or subtract on me either
    i just cant be there
    call me selfish, call me a bitch
    call me anything you please
    i know what i am and i know theres things you dont see
    dont cry and try to guilt me into saying sorry
    im not apologizing im too busy being irresponsible old me




    Submitted on 2005-10-20 09:55:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Umm, okidoky…mad were we? This is well, well written. The theme, I suppose you were doing as someone else’s view point… If not then it’s very malicious.
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
      that was [censored]in, I really liked that. Cold hard reality, and then some. this is one of the best poems I've read in a while and it made my day.
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by lost and alone | [ Reply to This ]


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