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Author:	onetruesmartass
ASL Info:	30/F/Wa
Elite Ratio:	4.01 - 934/791/77
Words:	104

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
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Happy Halloween!

All Hallow's Eve dots

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Pumpkins scowl from doorways,
Candles illuminate the night.
It's All Hallow's Eve,
Time for a good fright!

Witches walk with Princesses
Hero's stride with ghosts.
Dash from house to house,
See who can get the most.

Bright costumes and fake swords,
Morbidly delighted laughter.
Great big bowls of candy ensure
A sugar hang-over the day after.

It's getting late,
Time to head for bed.
Snuggle with teddy while
Visions of candy dance in their heads.

It's the Witching Hour
And all mortals are home.
Time for the creatures of the night
To have a party of their own.

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  YAY for halloween. This poem really gets me psyched up for next year, even though Halloween is considered for kids, I love it because for one night you can be whatever you want in the world. I didnt see any spelling mistakes, mind you I make them all the time.

"Witches walk with Princesses
Hero's stride with ghosts.
Dash from house to house,
See who can get the most."

This was probablly the best lines to read, they flow right into eachother and they stay on topic

now for the one and only problem I saw.

"It's getting late,
Time to head for bed.
Snuggle with teddy while
Visions of candy dance in their heads"

Something about the way you word'd this it seems like there is abit 2 much in last line. and it takes away from hte impression.

Sweet write and when I get time ill be reviewing your other ones as well :)
| Posted on 2006-06-04 00:00:00 | by Auron119 | [ Reply to This ]
  I've never celebrated Xmas...yet this poem is so inviting that I wish i could. It describes the main idea of Xmas in a delicious manner... it has a feel of youth...of eagerness.

Way to go!

-Nyn
| Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by Nynaeve | [ Reply to This ]
  OK, I'm a bit late...but I love that time of year and I liked this poem too. Trick or Treat is one of my most favorite times of the year to open my door to strangers! Now that I have kids it's fun to get creative with their costumes and have someone else cater to their sugar highs!
The ending had an awesome eerie quality to it and left plenty of room for some imagination! Nice job!

Candi
| Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh yeah...the after candyland party hour! I enjoy that about Halloween! Its fun to see all those kids running around and watching them. Though I dont get too many out here in BFE, but I have engrained visions of them when I lived in metropolis, HA! A very enjoyable read Traci! Have a good one and keep smilin'
| Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  This was fun to read for me because I like this type of [censored].

And of course this is my fave. time of the year.
And the ending was cool.

sorry for the dumb comment but thats all I have in me anymore.

~shawn
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
  ok this one is kick a*ss you have four stanzas with people having Halloween fun, candy and laughter and what not. first i must focus on the two lines one: witches and princesses the other heros and ghosts. seem worlds apart even almost black and white opposites, almost. i like how you group those. now to the last stanza you left the door open so to speak for non human entities, i believe that takes this poem to another level one where i can appreciate much more. anyhap enough of me babbling on i love it! excellent work

~mike
| Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
  Awww, nice and sweet, Travi, with a touch of dark at the end.

Soooo easy to read, I loved every word of it!

Great Stuff, now I can't wait to read Screa.

BTW how do you make a halloween pumpkin? (seriously)

Well done

Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  -_-...

How did you know that we had parties after you little humans went to sleep. Thats sad and we wanted to keep it a secret for about two more years or so. Oh well you sure are right! I loved this by the way. The season couldn't be better and this light hearted gift to all those little ghouls will make my heart sore for a moment, but I got to go my momma's screaming at me...

Ja Matte!
| Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by akaietowa-ru_18 | [ Reply to This ]
  Ahhhhh! Aren'e we such pagans?!? It's time to PAAAARRRTTTTAAAYYYYY!

So,I know what our 'ghouls' are gonna be for Halloween, but we haven't talked about what we want to be??? Maybe the creatures of the night that are gonna have a party of their own??? (Do they have owl costumes??? I want to be a night owl on the outside too!)

Very nicely done- Me Want Candeeeeee!

-Chell-
| Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]

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