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    dots Submission Name: The Giftdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 539
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    dotsThe Giftdots

    Her Gift ~

    Lets send a bouquet
    of bright color suprise
    begged the maiden
    to the blazing sunset sky

    Leave me night and
    to the greener place
    across the sea
    do fly

    Awaken him
    to Love and
    bring the Light
    bright to his dreaming eye

    His Gift ~

    The Sparkles of the night
    she will not miss

    Sang the Minstral
    addressing the moon and stars
    lighting the midnight abyss

    Shine so bright
    and guide her to dreamland
    with Faith's chariot
    and Hope's kiss

    Submitted on 2005-10-20 12:15:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a really nice poem. How romantic this is! I cant decide who's gift is better. They are both so brilliant and wonderful. To have this kind of love for someone is priceless. To want them to have the greatest gift, the greatest joy, above and beyond your own, is indeed true love. Priceless. This poem is very well written and expressed. So full of love. Beautiful! Take care!

    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you are at your best Tiff when you write like this. It was uplifting, inspiring and overwhelmingly packed with meaning. I read much into this ! A lovely lovely write.
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I see a description of yin yang in the sky and how it all fits in a microsecond. This feeds, that and now we learn a fantasy of how the sunset gets her colors. For concept I give this one an 11 on a scale of ten.

    Love is such a bright weaving of ultratones in skies we see as color, beautiful!
    peace and love,
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very uplifting and well written like every other poem of yours
    hope all is good i will keep checking in from time to time as i am tying not to write anymore but still comment
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      this my friend is beautifull im suprised u dont have any comments on it! how u put faith and hope in it was awesome! this is my favorite stanza!

    "Shine so bright
    and guide her to dreamland
    with Faith's chariot
    and Hope's kiss "

    Good job!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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