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    dots Submission Name: My Citydots
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    Author: Munchie_1226
    ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831/1834/185
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1806
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1395



    Description:
       Ya'll know me....I have to bust out with a little bit of freestyling here and there......

    *shrugs*

    This is not even near finished but I am going to see what kind of an opinion I get on it so far. I am writing this for somebody actually. So, anybody in the hip-hop game: help is appreciated.

    Much love!


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    dotsMy Citydots
    -------------------------------------------


    Ladies...Gentlemen....
    Girls......Boys....
    I welcome you to East Saint Louis, Illinois.

    If you touch my shit,
    I will break your hand.
    Listen here bitch,
    and understand.
    This my hood, this my land,
    618, I ain't playin.

    I got the block on lock.
    Everybody knows that I can't be stopped.
    People try to jock but I can't be topped.
    Only white bitch that can make this drop, make this pop.

    I don't give a fuck, this is my city.
    And in my city I show no pity.
    If you want beef, here I am, come get me.
    I might act silly but ain't shit pretty.

    Fake ass people just make me laugh,
    I do a lot of dirt, but I still take baths.
    Count a lot of money but I don't like math.
    I'm the type of bitch that won't settle for half.

    I'm still the hardest bitch up in this city,
    Gotta bad boy but he ain't P Diddy.
    People didn't want my city on the map but now I'm here and....

    *chorus*
    My city don't play that shit,
    And my city don't play no games.
    And my city won't call out your name.
    In my city we grow them thangs.
    And my city won't come out your game.







    Submitted on 2005-10-20 12:21:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah, awesome, I'm lovin this. I'm here in North Minneapolis, so I can totally relate to this. Loved this part:

    "If you touch my [censored],
    I will break your hand.
    Listen here [censored],
    and understand.
    This my hood, this my land,
    618, I ain't playin."

    Fantastic, keep it up

    -Miss M.
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Li Li, you da man!

    This is great, it's in ya face, it's yo mama, and it tells it like it is.

    Yep, even us old Aussies can be hip hop fans....

    Excellent work

    Be Hip Hop Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      and this is the Li Li that I know and love! the crazy in yo face "back back" bytch that I am honored to call my sis...:D

    loved the lil p diddy line and absolutely LOVED
    "Fake ass people just make me laugh,
    I do a lot of dirt, but I still take baths.
    Count a lot of money but I don't like math.
    I'm the type of [censored] that won't settle for half"

    lol lather rinse...repeat lil mama! looking forward to seeing this completed...

    ya sista from da otha mista
    Tina
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice song. Very in your face stuff a happenin in E St. Looooweeee! In the third line of the chorus did you mean to say call instead of come? Just wondering, sounds like it would fit better. Yeah, I can see you adding to this and building it up more.

    "I don't even know what's your purpose"

    Hmmm...that "what's" seems a little out of place there too. Anyway, just my thoughts. Have a good one and keep smilin'

    Hey, no fair editing while I am commenting, HA! How funny!
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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