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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       On prozac and Cory says that I am suppose to feel this way before I get better...but damn man it sucks.

    So yea I don't really like the beginning...but I think that it really is important because I start out feeling this way...and it is kinda a weak frustrating beginning because that is how she feels...weak and frustrated...but I like the end pretty good. It gets worse before it gets better.



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    She hopes like hell that this will fade
    Just doesn't feel like herself
    SHe wants but who knows what?
    and how do you go about getting it like that?

    She hopes like hell that she's rid of pain
    Just doesn't have time to heal everything
    she's hurt but she can't tell how
    she doesn't know why

    and she's frustrated
    feel her anger
    she's restless
    walk with her at night when she can't sleep
    she's sad
    make her happy when nothing is wrong

    she hope's like hell that this will fade
    she prays it's just another side effect
    another warning on the back label of her anit-depressants
    and it's funny these stupid things were suppose to help




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      [censored] the pills. i mean F U C K the pills. you don't need em. it's bull[censored]. happiness is inside you. there was this dude and he got to ask god three questions because if didn't then what i'm about to say isn't going to make sense - like most of the stuff i say. anyway, he asked god what was the purpose of our life here. and god said to find the greatest treasure of all time. and the dude asked where is this treasure hidden - in the mountains, the oceans, the sky, where? god said somewhere that many will never ever find it . . . maybe even noone deep inside us. and the dude asked what the treasure was. and god said - happiness. you don't need pills face your fears. but i don't have a degree saying i know what i'm talking about when it comes psychology but i'm just saying what i feel. whatevers. it was a good poem. you are really getting good at capturing emotion in words and transfering it onto the reader. brilliant.
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      this was funny but also a little im not sure almot like life everything you do has a catch to it and if you dont follow the rules then you loose anyways great twist of a good thought
    well done
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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