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    dots Submission Name: not knowing more addeddots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 528
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 767



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       I dont know what this is, I'm gonna add on to it later


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    dotsnot knowing more addeddots
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    so many things got me thinking bout my life/
    like how I live is not enough, was there a jesus christ/
    I hate to know that I went the wrong direction/
    feel like a girl that's just been raped while showing affection/
    facing facts are difficult, I'm going crazy in guilt/
    I"m like a cold and dead flower and my petal are wilt/
    Now its time to take the blame for what it is that I"ve done/
    Everybody go ahead so I'll be the last one/
    I try so hard, but sometimes I'm like, fuck it/
    no matter what, I always turn out to love it/
    I try to bring out the best in what we call the aberrant kings/
    pick up a dictionary if you don't know what aberrant means/




    Submitted on 2005-10-20 21:02:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that's what i've been talking about. u've finally found something to say. this was tight. u betta make it longer cuz the [censored] is good and if u can finish as good as u started this will be a nice verse. expand ur horizins to make u unstoppable. brush the haters off.
    | Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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