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    dots Submission Name: Pretty poisondots

    Author: brokensmile
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 241/326/148
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsPretty poisondots

    In love
    In loss
    The transitional second
    where both overlapped
    maybe thats where it hurt the most
    perhaps the acid
    eating away at my lips
    bit your heart to holes as well
    now im breathing through the vomit
    and youre relishing the trapped air
    within the phantomness of your existence.

    one word
    one glimpse
    her love is merely infatuation
    and the evidence
    is driving you insane
    one kiss
    one touch
    she removed the dirt
    that only covered our stains.

    I hold up my own hair now
    as i carefully rot away
    you hold up your smile
    covering any signs
    of depression's internal decay
    But somewhere the elastic
    snapped within me
    and blinded me from the right
    im still falling through the darkness
    with my feelings out of sight
    one more miserable smile
    some old makeup to hide the scars
    and with our pretty poisonous kisses
    Girls the world is ours.

    Submitted on 2005-10-20 21:10:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it is indeed very graphic. usually i dont like vivid images like "acid eating away my lips" but in this poem it gave an angry edge to what otherwise seemed regretful. i cant really explain why i like it...
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]

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