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    dots Submission Name: The Confessiondots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 624
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       There is a great sadness in watching a friend's life spin so out of control chaos becomes a daily routine. I've never felt more helpless than this moment as the tour guide at a slow death.


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    This is the hardest
    thing I've ever done
    all day, this calm
    solicitude, talking to you
    I feel as if I've been
    spanked by God, beaten
    within an inch of
    my life without a
    single bruise to prove
    any harm was done,
    invisibly reproved
    with no lashes
    glowing on my skin,
    like an absent father's
    rough communique, delayed.

    Caffeine, nicotine,
    amphetamines, L.S.D.,
    Chef Boy-Ar-Dee, chemists
    fuel the engine of my soul;
    wish I were indestructably
    made whole. Shoving needles
    in my arms, leaping from
    moving cars, laughing, cursing,
    coaxing, joking with a pissed off
    wife. Waiting for the helix
    to spiral upward into
    unapproachable delight.

    That's so beyond normal
    it's become routine,
    that's my world
    that's Tuesday,
    that's life.




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      First of all, I would like to thank you for that comment you gave me on the piece entitled My Heart Is A Soldier. It's greatly appreciated. I will definitely look into revising it to better uncover the details you commented on. Thank you. *smiles*

    Second, I would like to comment on this piece of yours...
    The flow, the feeling, the wording was perfect. Overall, I thought it was very good. It's sad however... I've never been through this kind of situation before personally. Although, I've had plenty of family members and close friends that have been victims of this. One way or another they've been able to get through it.

    I may not know all the details, but I do know that you will be okay...eventually.
    God will always smile down upon you.

    Good read and write.

    Crystal

    ...Thanks again.
    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by purely_complex | [ Reply to This ]
      thank you. good. finally, someone exhales. i've been hiding my shadow for too many years myself. this poem inspires me to show what everyone else sees anyway. what we hide becomes what everyone else sees?
    Miriam
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by mgnola | [ Reply to This ]
      I wasn't able to post my vote in ratings and I think this piece deserves it. Forgive my hastiness to review and send it to you.

    Look forward to reviewing more of your work.

    Thank you, Saby~*~
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by CaramelCandy | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, this type of life can be draining. I have no firsthand experience, but drug addiction and alcoholism is a disease that plagues my extended family.

    You can turn blue in the face explaining why this type of life is the way to a speedy death, but as long as the person lives denying their condition there is not much you can do. Prayer is the most powerful tool to hold onto for your friend.

    Your account saddens me. It pressures me to reflect on my uncles and how they're wasting away because of drug and alcohol addiction. My family (mi familia)... Your work is quite moving my fellow poet someday I will achieve this greatness you behold. I don't mean to over compliment, but the truth is the truth.

    Thansk for allowing me to read and enter your thoughts on such a contorversial and personal issue. Love Saby ~*~

    Have Hope...
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by CaramelCandy | [ Reply to This ]
      I absolutely loved loved this peice. It was one of those peices that gets me thinking and analyzing. Suprisingly I can relate, I've been there...in a younger less in tense way I suppose but I have been there. Making it through hurts, but it's the only way to go...literaly. Perfect flow, my attention did not sway once, bravo.

    Keep up the fantastica work.

    -Miss M.
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sad

    Rws trust me ive been there
    It sound like your talking about addiction

    All I can say is the image you got from my last write run with it
    Take time to relax
    Trust me i was probably the biggest addict youve ever seen

    And must of all I dont know your religious beliefs but the belief in a higher being to me God will carry you over any and all obstacles
    Remain strong and positive my friend
    For
    Positive energy is the Key
    Please keep in touch
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, good example of someone who feels they live in a hallway with no doors. It is sad to see a person wither away through the course of their own abnormal actions and claim it as being their life. These are the types that complain about the world being wrong when in fact it is their own ability to not adapt to it that makes the world such a bad place for them. At least thats been my observations through my minimal experience with this life. You can lead a horse to water but...?

    Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      It's so hard watching a tragedy you have no control over.

    I wonder if, in their high happiness, they realise the hurt and sadness they cause ti those that love them?

    I think not...

    Well written, and that's all I can say, I feel too much like I could have or should have written this myself

    Be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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