Description: i wrote this poem because i was really upset at something that happened at school. i called this person to come over to me in class and he just turned back to his work and pretented not to know me. that really hurt. turns out he didn't mean to turn away from me in the end.
it was alright not really my cup of tea or as powerful as some of your other poems. i find that you stating that you were hurt twice was dragging the poem and i didnt quite feel the emotion in this piece as the others. im not sure if this was a forced write or maybe one that you thought would come out differently... believe me i have plenty of those. well all in all keep writing
Like Mirr said you should expand on this more. Or do a second part to it and clarify the question at the end. I find the write really good maybe a lil more detail but i feel the emotions . But it is a good write. Keep It Up. Ali