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    dots Submission Name: Inside My Shoesdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       You want a description...aye yes. But hmmm. This is what I think that I will do. I think that I will please my mood and ramble a bit because indeed it makes me feel soo much better. But this is how I feel I say. I feel queer. So please I beg you just read my stupid little bit.

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    dotsInside My Shoesdots

    and in the hole of my tenny shoes
    my toes poke out
    and they complain
    and I guess that really I have nothing to gain
    by keeping them this way

    but still,

    I guess that this injustice is ruled by spite
    this ill mannered attempt to get back at life
    only succeeds in hurting me
    and I guess that everyone knows
    that this self destruction is directly directed to my pitiful, pitiful toes

    Submitted on 2005-10-21 13:32:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that reminds me - i need to cut my toe nails. they get to be a pain. if they aren't minded then they grow out of control - though that has never happened to me i don't think i want it. but when they do get really big i just have to cut them. i don't really feel like cutting them sometimes and i think that i'll just let em grow. but when they start poking at the ends of my shoes and i can't get thim in - that's a problem. u gotta keep an eye on the problem. any time it changes a little make a move who knows maybe that move will make all the bricks fall a part cause u hit the weak point and then you'll have one less problem to think about - like cutting my toe nails. well, that's my problem. it's gross, isn't it? . . . oh yeah - back to your poem, cool cool stuff.
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting and very original way of conveying a common message. That is always a good thing. The only complaint from me is that tenny shoes should be tennis shoes. Its sounds like tenny shoes when you say it fast though. :P
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      wow!i am pleased with this piece! very similar to so much of my own work the i was drawn completely into your work as if it was my own
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by The Minister | [ Reply to This ]
      this is what i love. the point that only you couldve made.. its a unique thought that isnt overdone but has a universal feel to it as though you know exactly whats being said.
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]

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