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    dots Submission Name: I am deathdots
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    Author: roxygirl239
    ASL Info:    14/f/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 450/305/44
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Title says it all. I'm feeling kinda "dark" today. lol. This ones mad freaky.


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    dotsI am deathdots
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    I am the whisper
    Of the catacombs
    I will call
    For you
    Eventually

    I need
    My company
    Remember though
    One visit lasts forever

    I long for
    Your dark crimson
    The sweet taste
    Almost dwelling
    On my cold lips

    I feed
    On your soul
    So I can
    Dominate
    Your body

    You may
    Still run
    You may
    Still hide
    But I will catch up
    I lurk in the shadows

    I am
    Everyone's
    Everything's
    Deepest
    Darkest
    Fear
    I am death
    You will die




    Submitted on 2004-04-19 19:08:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is an excellent piece of death, Are you to say you could almost tatste death's presence on a past experience?you seemed to be very familiar with the symptoms that come with his presence, how sweet.I look forward to reading more of your poetry.-vlad09
    | Posted on 2004-10-01 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]
      hey this was a good one
    normaly i would tell you to make the lines longer but in this case the one or two word lines spoke for themselves
    | Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by locke | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is disturbing, but it's good. only one thing: I would get rid of the last line. it isn't needed in my opinion.
    | Posted on 2004-04-20 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW. This poem was wonderful. the short lines kept a mysterious feel to the poem, and the well chosen words added to the entire tone. I loved the end. Nice work
    | Posted on 2004-04-19 00:00:00 | by shatteringshadow | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really cool, i'm reading this book (Wizard of the Grove by Tanya Huff) and this reminded me of Lord Death in the book, this is really really good i specially like the I feed
    On your soul
    So I can
    Cominate
    Your body
    That stanza but should cominate be contaminate i don't know though i could just be crazy thanks a million for sharing
    ~*~Pryncess
    | Posted on 2004-04-19 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]
      i like your style. very unique. i love this poem, but you need to write positive more. i havent read all your poems so i cant say much, but this poem is awseome. listen to some collective soul or some bob marley or eric clapton or blind melon... that will get you in a good mood. i promise. jst some positive music. ROCK ON MY SISTA!!!
    | Posted on 2004-04-19 00:00:00 | by melancholypoet | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good, I love all dark, scary, vampire, monster, ghoul, what not, I love the blood stuff the most, lol. this is good your word choice is awesome!
    | Posted on 2004-04-19 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good dark write, i love the morbid style...death comes to us all. i wrote a quadruple haiku on the reaper a few days ago...
    the reaper is everywhere...keep death coming.
    | Posted on 2004-04-19 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]


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