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    dots Submission Name: another daydots
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    Author: sickly
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 545/537/203
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsanother daydots
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    the sun, venus, the darkness and the moon
    invalidating wishes
    and hopes
    orbiting
    nothing like silence
    shadow wars
    night creatures
    it just keeps coming
    their rest is final
    the end has come
    bear down
    name your poison
    venom soup?
    try justice
    great and true
    reverberations in an empty head
    good-bye to the insane
    this is another age
    and that is no sensitive issue
    in space; in time




    Submitted on 2005-10-21 14:47:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love the phrase reverberations in an empty head.. this is one of those poems you could read in more than one way. theres no in your face message but several. it ended weirdly..
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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