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another day


Author: sickly
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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another day



the sun, venus, the darkness and the moon
invalidating wishes
and hopes
orbiting
nothing like silence
shadow wars
night creatures
it just keeps coming
their rest is final
the end has come
bear down
name your poison
venom soup?
try justice
great and true
reverberations in an empty head
good-bye to the insane
this is another age
and that is no sensitive issue
in space; in time




Submitted on 2005-10-21 14:47:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i love the phrase reverberations in an empty head.. this is one of those poems you could read in more than one way. theres no in your face message but several. it ended weirdly..
| Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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