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this is my life


Author: sickly
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Words: 79
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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this is my life



loving
laughing
crying
it never ends
why regret anything?
just see things through
there were some good things
and there was horror
my fill
my share
why be shy about it?
that's what being a man is all about
this is my life
and don't you forget about it
loving memories about real things
and a depth of hatred like no other
trying to make something of it all
everything does matter
still
there's no pretending to be done




Submitted on 2005-10-21 14:52:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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