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    dots Submission Name: More like youdots

    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Friendship
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       yeah yeah i know i know i cant spell for shit but ignore that. my spelling isnt what matters here its the message im trying to make.

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    dotsMore like youdots

    Hes a lyrical master
    Tryin to bring peace to the people who are making this world a diseaster
    He's showin love to the youth of our nation
    Tryin to change the minds of a hateful generation
    He's revealin truths that people try and ignore
    Not just acknolaging it but tryin to do more
    He sees what the youth of today have to go through
    Constantly watchin their back cause they never know what kind of thugs is gonna pass through
    Hes on a mission to stop unesicerry crime
    A mission that gettin harder over time
    In his mission he's consistant
    He's tellin the truth and is always so persistant
    People like that are spread far and few
    You know what im gonna try and br more like you

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      as usual great piece. Spelling doesnt really matter as long as people understand what your trying to say. I wish there were more people like this now a days. THis person really cares about others and what they have to deal with. Hes a hoper, he wants things to get better but it seems like when one person has so much hope for the nation and for his fellow peopleit brings joy to many around him but not to all. Which like I said I wish there were more people like this because for every person you get like this they help usually at least another 10 or so.. so that would at least start making our world so much better. Its hard to look at someone and see how much better they bring and then look at ourselves and ask why we arent doing more to better our fellow people. Just be yourself and not your friend but if thats what you want to become than make it for yourself but do it in your own way and not his way. Okay I feel like Im rambling on so great write as usual. I like this because your talking about something that applies to alot of people, wanting to be like a friend.
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by manderz_1207 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is tight. is this poetry? it seems more like ur rappign to me. wait...this is about troy. haha. he thinks he's a lyrical master. u gonna make is head big now.
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by young p | [ Reply to This ]
      damm chick thanx for the luv. i don't think this was much of a poem. bu it made a damm good rap. u sure i'm better than u? i think u might get signed before i do. i think ur the true lyrical genius. another thing...if u don't have a dictionary, i suggest u buy one. it would help with the whole spelling thing. i thought ya'll were joking about this whole thing. u guys are gonna make me act like a big softie now. see ya later chick
    | Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I get the message, but poetry is more than a bunch of rhyming, dijointed couplets thrown together to say something... It's about the passion and the word choice and he meaning beyond the meaning... It's great to write about something and even to be a little secretive with your message, but to throw together a bunch of words and call a poem is pointless... You are wasting the time of all poets by not taking the time to write in a poetic manner... Work on it and get back to me
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by Meckes | [ Reply to This ]
      hey i noe who ur talkin about! this is cute gena imma try hard to cuz hes cool! wow ur spellin man! but i still love ya! weeeee! o i got myspcae now! i look u up!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh,wow...I like this.Well,I know most definately that you can not spell,but that's nothing against you! :) Everyone makes mistakes...But the message you put into this piece is very true.I agree with you on that.There should be more people like that,but there's few and the only way there can be more is more and more people follow their example.Well,I really this write alot.Great job. (Yes,I know that phrase is redundant,but it's the truth.) God bless! :D - Lindel
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by LRRolins | [ Reply to This ]

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