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    dots Submission Name: Headeache.dots
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    Author: Kwanying
    ASL Info:    22/F/Denmark
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 23/29/13
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 183
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 342



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    dotsHeadeache.dots
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    My head is spinning,
    the eyes are drifting.
    I see no clearence,
    all is dark and bright at the same time.

    A lightning strikes,
    tears fall down.
    I hear no clearence,
    only noise...

    My head is not mine,
    the controle is gone.
    I am gone,
    oblivion awaits.




    Submitted on 2005-10-21 18:24:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ive had a minor migrane but that was just a side affect of my medication! but this is really good to me! i think its rather difffrent! good joB! gosh i spelled diffrent wrong!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-07-15 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      

    This piece I wrote after being at the emergency room with a migræne attack, a killer headache.
    And writing it down, helped me explain people around me how it feels.
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by Kwanying | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like a headache i once had. As for mystmakers comment on "a lightning strike" and not knowing what it means its in my mind supposed to be a medafor to discribe how you feel. Its a good piece and i felt that the meaning was self explanitory.
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by Stinkywizlteats | [ Reply to This ]
      this was an interesting piece to read...

    there were a couple of lines that didn't make total sense (for exampe)

    "A lightning strikes"

    I don't think I quite understood the meaning on this one but that could be just me...

    or maybe this:

    "the eyes are drifting."
    perhaps you mean 'my eyes are drifting'?

    this was a pretty unique piece. nice to see something different

    keep writing!
    -mystmaker
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by MystMaker | [ Reply to This ]



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