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The other side. -------------------------------------------
Noises are heard,
voices speak.
A silhouette is seen,
but not up close.
Eyes are being opened,
they will not close.
Fear is smelled,
it seets in the air.
A man shows on the pier of an old lake...
...Theres something here...
this is short! i think you could have a lil more detail in this! but it was good! but puttin a lil more lines will top it off great but it was really good! good joB! ~akaila~
this is good, its short and thats great as long as your message is coveyed. i think it could have a little more to it, you left us hanging, which is good, i do it alot also, but it could have a little more info perhaps about this man... overall it was good i like it. -lesh09
Submission Name: The other side.
