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The Pain

Author: Star
ASL Info:    15 F WI
Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 125 /127 /42
Words: 81
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I wrote this right after i got dumped i dunno u tell me

The Pain

My heart has betrayed me
for the last time.
I dont think I can
trust it ever again.
I cast you out of my body
and pray to all of the devine
powers that you will never
find me or come crawling
back to me.
The things you allowed me to do
The temptations you lead me through
are far worse than ever before
I cannot go through this pain anymore

Submitted on 2005-10-21 20:50:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  you defo got your point across here
i really enjoyed reading this..........
good stuff
trust is hard to gain and give
| Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]
  very very powerful writing,
i can relate very much to it and actully understood it as it was words i had but never wrote or couldnt write, excellent!
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by scented | [ Reply to This ]
  the feelings that you convey in this piece are very powerful. keep up the good work, i will keep an eye out for your writing.
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by berly | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the meaning you are trying to convey through this piece, but i always think all of us as artists can find room to improve, but imperfection is what gives many works of art charactor.
| Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
  I think u hit the bullseye on this feeling u write about here...
Really good writting.
Especially good in line 12, 13 and 14.
| Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by Kwanying | [ Reply to This ]

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