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    dots Submission Name: runningdots
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    Author: frozenflame
    ASL Info:    22/m/elsewhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 151/231/68
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 768
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 853



    Description:
       this is just me venting. it's still not helping. tell me what you think. i feel that i'm losing my touch, but oh well. i might just stop posting until i'm inspired again.


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    dotsrunningdots
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    all i want to do is run
    i want to hide from the pain
    i can't handle the way i feel anymore
    i want to hurt so many people
    and she's the only one who can stop me
    we can't be together right now
    i want to close this distance
    they are holding me back
    but what will they do when the time comes
    they can't keep me here forever
    and i will make sure of that
    if running is all i can do
    than running is what it has to be
    my legs are already tired
    i can feel the muscles tense
    they are fighting me every last stretch
    i will cut this out of my mind
    i want to break out
    just get away from me
    let me take this into my own hands
    i want to go home
    all i can think of is you
    and i'm on my way




    Submitted on 2005-10-22 05:09:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well Chika I disagree with you. It is not that he depends on the other person it is that he turns to the other person. IF you actually read the poem you would have got the stanza:
    let me take this into my own hands...
    That is a form of independence and you can't live in a society and not depend on others so becareful how you phase things. While in a relationship you depend on the other person not like in a friendship where you depend on the other person and get nothing. And it is not pressure especially when the other person doesn't do anything to keep him inline and it just happens . But that is my opinion. Now on to the poem. The poem is a great write alot of emotion and feelings in it. Keep up the writing.
    Love You
    Ali
    | Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by sweet_innocence | [ Reply to This ]
      the person in this peice seems to be too dependant on another person to stop them from what they dont wnt to do all i can say is grow up and control your own emotions and stop putting so m uch pressure on this other person to keep you in line. it is the fastest way to put the brakes on a relationship if one person is too needy and needs to be kept inline all the time by the other person. personally i think that is pathetic. but that is just me no offense by this it is just what i got from the peice best of luck


    adios
    Chika
    | Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by chikaz4life | [ Reply to This ]


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