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    dots Submission Name: He met a Girldots
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    Author: mandy dupuis
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 109/138/57
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHe met a Girldots
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    I heard he met a girl
    just the other day
    suitcases in his hands
    He had to stop to pray
    Just had to ask
    Is today a someday
    He was alive
    and she was a prayor
    He gave his grace telling no lies
    She came straight from heaven
    just past the sky's
    but so scared of the truth
    All of the lies
    about love and life
    Because tomorrow he will die
    Unsatisfied hit with belief
    a sadden heart a tear of grief
    Forget the face of light
    He wanted to make her a wife
    One more day a pill to relieve the pain
    As she's stands crying He covers her
    He is now her rain...




    Submitted on 2005-10-22 09:05:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey,
    'Just past the skies' was a beautiful description of where Heaven is.

    You should break the poem up into stanzas with punctuation to make it easier to read.

    could this be the dying prayer of a wounded man about to die who sees a beautiful woman standing over his bedside and immediately falls in love?

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    | Posted on 2006-03-19 00:00:00 | by D McDaniel | [ Reply to This ]
      Very touching poem, trully amazing. I like the story of the poem, here love knows no bounds, exept death that is, which only makes the relationship genuine as there is no time and no point for the common lies and games of love, which take away its true essence. I like the ending..
    "As she's stands crying He covers her
    He is now her rain..."
    This poem takes us on a flight to the sensitivity and the grandeur of unconditional love, thanks for sharing!
    -maria
    | Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by AutumnLeaves | [ Reply to This ]


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