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    dots Submission Name: Raw Twice Overdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 981
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 402



    Description:
       I borrowed the title from Roland Barthes, but since you can't copyright titles, it's fair game.


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    dotsRaw Twice Overdots
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    Raw twice over
    that's how my skin feels
    like I've slept
    on a bed of glass for days
    that wasn't sharp enough
    to pierce the skin
    but sharp enough
    to feel like it did,
    and I'm wearing
    a rough wool sweater,
    and I've sprained my ankle:
    it's black atop blue,
    and the Vicodin isn't working.




    Submitted on 2004-04-19 20:03:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      can be just the description of a really bad day - or it can mean so much more when you want to read something deep into it. either way I like it. you keep me thinking, I like that. well done.
    | Posted on 2004-04-20 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm sure i won't know what you meant when you wrote this but i have my own interpretation!
    i really liked
    "That wasn't sharp enough
    To pierce the skin
    But sharp enough
    To feel like it did"
    one Q: what's Vicodin?
    | Posted on 2004-04-20 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      Ya, its hard to tell whether there is that deeper meaning behind this piece, or if it is just rather "skin deep" as precedently quoted. A couple good lines, but further explanation and work needed.
    | Posted on 2004-04-19 00:00:00 | by Anarius | [ Reply to This ]
      I've stepped out of the ring and out of an Op and felt like this and no end of bathing in ice cubes will move the hot pain.
    My but that hurt just to read it...
    Good.
    K
    | Posted on 2004-04-22 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      Ewwww ---ouch---silent raw pain screams--and echoes more screams.Chamomile lotion probably won't do much either--this is great--the most tortuous twisted thing I have read of yours I think.The imagery certainly grabbed my attention--good combo of bizzare and brilliant ,,,brrrrrrrrrr Silver
    | Posted on 2004-04-24 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely, i feel the pain, some days are just so...well blah is my word for it. Feel better, m'lady. ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-04-24 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]


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