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    dots Submission Name: See With Your Heartdots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1018
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    Description:
       It is about opening to beauty, breaking the old patterns and allowing each love to take us higher.


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    dotsSee With Your Heartdots
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    See with your heart
    and you will have beauty before you.

    Let your soul speak of beauty
    and you will never be short of words.

    Pray with those words
    and you will always have joy.

    Be filled with joy
    and your heart envisions love.

    Break the circle of love
    and extend it to an ascending spiral.





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      It's funny triangles make up much of the universe we see as human. Here you point out the progression love finds as the heart sees. For me the trinity is heart, soul, and mind..

    You challenge us to ask the heart and soul, it's wise and deep advice which I will take. And then to send the love ascending,
    beautiful!

    Always love, isn't it why we're here?

    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      The title captured my attention and the write itself is very thought provoking. Something we should all take time to do, "see with our heart".
    "Let your soul speak of beauty
    and you will never be short of words." < just lovely!
    The entire poem is inspiring.
    Nice work!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      A very nice piece! Seeing with your heart, praying with your soul, then reaching out to others. Having joy within. A good write!
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Overall, very nice!

    But, this part threw me off a little bit -
    Be filled with joy
    and your heart envisions love.'
    - just a suggestion but syntactically it kinda sound funny, you know? A slight change to something like -
    'Be filled with joy
    and your heart will envision love.
    - would iron out that little kink. Just a small thing but I think it would help, don't you?

    I found this piece to be holy, simple and pure in its message. A great prayer/mantra to believe and follow. From what I've read of yours, you're definitely a very spiritual, loving person.

    Aww, isn't that nice? I think we need more lovely thoughts like this. for I find it hard to come across an inspirational piece that doesn't drip with hallmark cheese. And this one doesn't.

    You've written it with enough flair to overcome those cheesy connotations.

    Another nice piece from you that I enjoyed, thank you.
    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely love poem. These words are wonderful and so very true. Seeing with your heart is something everyone should do. The mind can be your worst enemy, too busy thinking all the time. The heart just gives itself unselfishly hoping to have that love returned. I like how you carry the idea from the last line forward into the next stanza. This is an uplifting poem. Too bad more people dont feel this way. The world might be a better, kinder place. Thanks for sharing. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      this is the key to a joyful life, to see with the heart. that is
    where true beauty lies. and making a prayer out of words is a wonderful concept, something i do try to do in my life. it is a very zen thing to do and made me think of the book "Chop Wood, Carry Water," making everything you do
    and say a prayer in your day.

    beautiful message Chrystine. thanks for sharing this with us.

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really lovely and well written...very profound words ...im adding this to my favs...simple and simply great!...stormy
    | Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good write. Just like many of the others have said, the first line is the powerful, but to me, I must agree with Ron. The second paragraph is the most powerful. This is going in my favorite list.
    Peace, TK
    | Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by ThomasKane | [ Reply to This ]
      "See with your heart
    and you will have beauty before you."
    i feel that more people need to be able to see with their heart. i loved your poem. it was short and simple and yet it had a big message to get across.

    suzi
    | Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by sushi wok | [ Reply to This ]
      this is simple and i loved it.
    allowing yourself to see with your heart.
    that is harder and harder to do sometimes.
    finding beauty because of it. is a breath that escapes your lips.
    "Pray with those words
    and you will always have joy."
    very cool.
    snuff
    | Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem gives me the message of always look forward
    too many visits to the past can run you into a deadend

    My favorite line
    Pray with those words
    And you will always have joy
    Beautiful

    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      A new favorite... Thanks for your beautiful words and giving me hope for love to come! My fav lines are " Be filled with joy and your heart envisions love... The thought of my heart envisioning love is a wonderful concept and something I certainly try to do... just have not been very successful
    Much love,
    Ella
    | Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]


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