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    dots Submission Name: Stopping Only For The Scenerydots
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    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 1159
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       hey, another poem. hmm, I don't know kind've self explanitory leave comments if ya want to know more, i don't know.


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    dotsStopping Only For The Scenerydots
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    A testing silence with out you and me,
    I'm only stopping for the scenery.
    Riding with dead hope, the cries leave me empty.
    same story echoed throughout eternity.

    So little time, belittled to suffocate.
    A mechanical love, too easy for you to desecrate.
    Like a virus to procreate,
    Another trail of brokenhearts, you have no soul mate.
    At the same point in chronic heart-ache we'll just wait.

    Another kiss,
    taste the bliss.
    We wait,
    No soul mate;
    the feeling I miss
    It's too late.

    In acidic rain-you left it shattered,
    broken and tattered.
    Now play the act,"it never mattered."

    Leaving a descrete show of arrogance,
    tied with a touching display of eminence.
    Never knew it as common sense.

    Shedding no sorrow.
    you wont see me tomorrow.




    Submitted on 2005-10-23 00:23:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was beautifully written.
    I really liked this alot, there was alot of emotion to this.
    really captivating story, the form & rhyming just added to the poem.
    I really have nothing to say about this.
    I think it was well written, though sad, I think so many hearts can relate to it.
    you did a good job
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-11-09 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      whoa what a write. Its quite different than other writes of yours. I like it as usual. You make me very proud. Love you my son
    | Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]


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