Incurable Disease by stormyskies

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Author:	stormyskies
ASL Info:	35 f melb Aust
Elite Ratio:	4.28 - 937/796/189
Words:	117

Class/Type:	Poetry/
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Description:
The way I seem to feel at times..although I dont think that i was conciously aware of it til tonight..

Incurable Disease dots

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Scars from the past slowly fade,
Festered wounds heal.
The pain gradually eased,
Yet parts still seem incurably diseased.

Black and pure hatred of me,
Knaws at my mind and soul.
Leaving me longing,
To amputate the gangrenous areas.

Though impossible as that is,
I’m left searching for a cure.
Or to even understand,
What and where this disease lies.

Moments few and far between
Allow the unchanged me to surface.
Disguised by a person I barely know.
Such parts apparently one.

Baffled as to how or why.
Incapable of comprehending, another loving me,
let alone myself.
When not even my parents
Were able to do such things.

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  This poem really touched me, I feel as though when I read your poetry i am learning more about you, even though you are very close to me.
| Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]
  Just think on that horse running so free in the ocean, his freedom can be inspiration to look ahead and focus on the future which can be as bright as you make it. Its when we let the past form our future when we get into trouble. Pain will heal just like death slowly fades into our memory, if you want it to.
Its positive thinking that brings on the cure.
Now; sit up on the couch, lay the pillow to your right and pay the receptionist on you way out, and I'll see you tomorrow- but keep taking those little green pills!
Hahhaahahaaa!
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
  The words and thoughts you sprung out in this poem are very deep and personal
Much credit to you for having the strength
and courage to put them into words

I suffered from the same disiese i think but in my case it was depression If thats what you are talking about trust me there is a silver lining at the end of the tunnel
Positive thoughts are the key

Take Care
Ron
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  much thought went into this, or very little at all (instinctive writing) i think.
i sounds like the pain keeps coming but you don't know what from. i feel like that a lot, but i've learned to deal.
i agree that this is a piece where flow and rhythm matter not so much like the words and content.
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by LoneWolf | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh God. This is so sad! Touched lots in me. I hope you find that spark of love that is hiden in you :)

Very honest and heartfelt
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow man, that was awesome. It was such a deep write. Full of thought and honesty, no matter how sad it is. It flowed well, and in my opinion, I think that you could use this not only as a poem, but as lyrics as well. My favorite stanza was
"Scars from the past slowly fade,
Festered wounds heal.
The pain gradually eased,
Yet parts still seem incurably diseased."
Because I can relate to that, and you captured the feeling perfectly. Great write!
~Kriss
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
  This was beautiful in a much-less-perfect-than-truly-honest way... It spoke volumes in 21 lines and I think that is more important than whether it flowed well or sounded great... It was understandable and easy to relate to... A plus in my book
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by Meckes | [ Reply to This ]
  You know how much I love your work... this is no exception. We have a common battle, but you seem to express your pain and emotions much more clearly than I do... may fav stanza is
" Though impossible as that is,
I’m left searching for a cure.
Or to even understand,
What and where this disease lies." we always seem to be searching for the cure to past pain but can never quite find the source of the pain and sufering. Your description of childhood torture was very evident to me and you left the reader longing for a sloution to your pain... very well done, as always

Ella
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]

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