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Letter To Myself


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 128
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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this is a letter from my know it all self to my poetic self....it's how i think my writers block come on...tell me what you think...


Letter To Myself



Hello how are you doing
oh yea i forgot it
i forgot that you are
just another suicidal bitch
the one who reps Newark, New Jearsy
and has a real smart mouth
and had to hold her breath
when she moved down south

Hello how are you
Oh i forgot once more
i forgot that you're
just another suicidal whore
with cuts on her arm
been in the world too damn long
but hey i should've known
you'd play the same ole song

dear me..shit
did you just cuss me out
when i'm the one who
brought poetry out of your damn mouth
i may be a suicidal bitch
even a suicidal whore
just know that i ain't
doing shit for you no more
peace...




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  I liked this one too...it had a bit more of a rapish feel than I am used to...it's origional...so thats good. I liked the concept of writing a letter to yourself...
Very good job on this poem.

...jessie thomas...
| Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
  okay... well this is something on..... yourself insulting yourself.... ans that is unusual.... so ok... hmmmm can't say alot on this cause It aint my categorie... letters... =S ok, anyway It aint my favorite but continue, and lets hope(I hope) that U'll continue in poetry and not letter... lol... Jearsy... hmmm Jersey? maybe... anyway I dont have a lot to say on this... hmmm piece of hmmm. [censored]? lol anyway aint my style maybe thats why... so anyway continue
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by Wolfeye_666 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a really great piece its something i would write and i like reading things like this it sort of contributes to what i think about. It was a cool idea how you used the letter to your self its like your talking to your self but your writing it down well keep writing. ~kat~
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by inuyasha_s girl | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW. I enjoyed this a lot. I've written letters to myself before, but I don't think I've ever written back. I should try that sometime. This poem was both fascinating and inspiring, thank you. Keep it up!

{Kate}
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]
  Okay, at the end, peace is totally unnessescary. It seems much more like a war raging within your soul, and peace is nowhere in sight.
You shouldn't EVER let yourself write letters to itself, instead, use discussion. You've given us one side of the story, and I'd like to hear more.
I am a stickler for punctuation and grammar, and I think this poem really needs it. Everyone writes their poems in lowercase, and for no good reason; It really doesn't help, it just discourages me from continuing.
Tekin Kashami
| Posted on 2005-10-23 00:00:00 | by Tekin_Kashami | [ Reply to This ]


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